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Click here"Of course. We need to make sure we are both comfortable in seeing each other with others if it goes to that. I might see you with another woman," she said blushing. "I know Michelle wants you, she already said she wants to meet you. Thinks your handsome," she said with another one of her playful grins. "I wonder if I will like that or not. Now I am confused," as she giggle.
"Oh yeah? You might like watching me as much as I like watching you, but I doubt it! You know you will be the center of attention right? The new wife to the group and all," he admitted to knowing how popular she would be.
"Ah uh," she nodded playfully. "And you will be so hard seeing the other hubby's wanting your hot wife, won't you?" grabbing his dick over his shorts and squeezing lightly.
"You know the answer to that!" he leaned in and kissed her plump new lips. "So what's the dress code for this kind of thing?"
"I'm not sure yet, I'll check with Michelle today when we have lunch together."
Look for future stories about Bella and Tim's journey into the hot wife lifestyle, titled "Bella's Hot Wife Adventures."
- COMMENTS
wantstowatch1910 days agoLoved the way the wife wanted more and more, just as I would want my wife to become, loving the showing off to others and teasing other men, more please
Anonymous23 days agoGreat story! Very well put together. I can’t think of a better way to hear about a hot wife. I realyl hope you continue with the stories!!
HusbandX4 months agoMany of the quotes contain no attribution, and form incomplete sentences. Every time I hit one in the story it took me out of the story, because of missing words. For example:
"Sorry," returning the smile, and continued to move around the bar.
"Sorry," (he said, returning the smile, and...) or (she said, returning the smile, and....) or (he returned the smile, and...) or (she returned the smile, and...). Any of them work, anything but as written. The reference to the speaker is missing, and it can be an attribution, a name, or a pronoun...but something needs to go in there between the quoted statement, and the rest of the sentence
Again:
"Thanks! He got it for me. He likes showing me off. Damn, I forgot my lipstick," looking at herself in the mirror, adjusting her hair.
It could be:
she said, looking at herself in the mirror, or it could be
she looked at herself in the mirror, or it could be
Bella said, looking at herself in the mirror, or it could be
Bella looked at herself in the mirror.
Having said that, those moments are perfect times to go for a stronger verb. Bella could look at herself in the mirror, but she could also gaze, study, glance, stare, or do something with a stronger, more descriptive verb, than just look. Just an observation.
There is a certain redundancy in some sentences, using the same word more than once, For example:
She could feel the girl's breath on her chest as she breathed.
Brreath, breathed. One or the other might be changed out to lend variety and depth, and to use a stronger word. It might be "she felt the girls breath on her chest as she panted/sighed/gasped/wheezed, etc.
Last observation; drowning in pronouns:
Tim confessed he loved watching how he fucked her and bent her to his will.
He, he, her, her, his. Five pronouns in there, and no playbook. The sentence can be read several ways, and if one gets lost just in that sentence, it takes a quick re-read to re-orient, and the magic of the story has been lost.
Perhaps: Tim confessed he loved how Jake fucked her, and bent her to his will. A little attribution goes a long way.
I can't get past the grammar and syntax to dive into the plot or characters. For any fiction, I have to "suspend disbelief" long enough to read and put myself in the story, but I keep getting pulled out. Editing will help. The dynamic between Bella and Tim and Jake (et al) is interesting and enticing and I'd like to know the characters and the story better, but the sentence structure make a rocky road instead of a highway.
