by WantABWriter
Wow, a 9 year time warp is epic. Mark ran for his fucking life from the crazy bitch. And her mother still was keeping her home up? But what I don't get is that once an ex, it's almost always a better idea to stay an ex. The office story was aborted full term. This isn't good, it makes me very unhappy. It really dragged on; I can feel the love of writing to see letters on the screen, but it has to be edited to remove all the junk.
And I started skipping at an exponential pace around the ring buying time. I saw something about marking each other and werewolves came to mind. Then I saw something about her saying he was paying for some flowers. Bzzzzttt. He made a mistake again. Do not like.
Learn the difference between "shuttered" and "shuddered".
I mean really. Finish it up! Which of course is a joke since all of this is done and posted. But just to let you and everyone else know, this is dragging...........
I realize that it's too late now. But if you ever post again, use an editor.
ever going to learn why Jeremy has never liked Janet? This story is so good that I can overlook the bad writing skills.
when is this train wreck of a story going to end? hopefully with this instalment.
Great continuation of the story. More please & would like to hear them discuss what broke them apart.
What was the purpose of this "chapter three of the second half"? It accomplished nothing.
He's a lucky boy,many women wouldn't have put up with his behaviour - hopefully he'll have learnt a good lesson this time !
The Judged owned his wife, huh? Guess he really was old fashioned.