All Comments on 'Work From Home (Full)'

All going quite well, then you used that "Daddy" shit.

They are presented to We-The-Readers as a committed hetro couple. No matter how much they are playing with each other, there is no way it qualifies as LW under the LITEROTICA definition. This posting fits in Erotic Coupling or Romance (without the pink roses, Mantovani, and butterflies.)

Good story!

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If he was her husband then there was no cheating. Did they have sex on her zoom meeting?

Absolutely not a fan of the style used by the writer. Only positive was it is supposed to be a husband and wife. Still, the plot line used along with other thematic devices have been overused.

5 Stars-I agree with the horny lady who shall remain nameless!

Like she said, "Five stars." Nicely done.

With Jimmy on this one. It was, and still is, a good story, but lose the “daddy” shit and the silly sex talk.

Starting close to a third of the sentences with She + verb turned this from an averagely bad piece of writing into an annoying one. Assonance and alliteration only work (a.) in sparingly measured doses and (b.) with certain sounds, words, and phrases.

Better as the more complete story rather than the last version. Nice tale that I quite enjoyed. Not quite certain how it gets to be a Loving Wife(ves) story but don't feel the need to split hairs.

enjoyed. Thanks for your writing.