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Sizzling!

Wow. That was HOT! Well written hot sex getting more complex with each chapter and making me so curious! How can all this work out?

Put this in the nonerotic section

this is like a poorly written memoir. There is nothing erotic about this story. You fly past the sex as if it's not important. do you know what this website is about?

Hot!

Blew my load to this, awesome update man keep it up!

re: Switching Perspectives

Yeah, I hear what you're saying. After writing two stories about ordinary guys lusting after unobtainably hot women, I wanted to try to experiment with stuff a bit outside of my comfort zone--like writing from the point of view of a woman and switching narrators every few pages. I totally agree about it being jarring, and while I do think it works for this particular story, I don't think I'll be doing it again in the future. It's really tough to maintain sexual tension when you're jumping from narrator to narrator.

Brings back great memories

Your story is excellent and certainly sounds true. I loved it. I also loved watching my girlfriend take another guys cock and the indescribably wonderful taste of their freshly made creampie oozing from her pussy..

Enjoyed

Wanked my cock off all though this read ,looking for a story to cum now

Really Enjoyable???

"I ... I've NEVER seen anyone treated like this before. Are ... are you okay? Pamela? Are you okay? Everything we did to you ... my GOD! I never saw something..." It took a few seconds, but the beautiful stripper finally found the strength within herself to answer.

"N-Never felt b-b-bet-better..."

What happened to making love as opposed to forcing yourself on someone that you think "needs it"? This is high on the pervert ladder.

Response to anonymous

My dear anonymous friend,

Thank you for your informed analysis of my work, feedback which I particularly welcome as it so skilfully evaluated my use of the short story form and erotic motif. It's rare to see such adept deconstruction expressed so succinctly.

Your advice, though unoriginal and certainly not well-intentioned, has duly been noted, and I cordially send the reciprocal message direct to your fundament.

great

You are amazing at this... Very gratified to see you return to writing. Hope there will be more soon!

To Anonymous ...

It was a paragraph? A 1000 word paragraph? Who the fuck was your English teacher! ;-)

sequence?

was this Chapter 36 or 37? I don't want to miss one...

Get an editor

Then try again. This was awful.

Awesome Story

Really nice story, liked the overall fell and the humorous dialogs.
A great read, thanks!

Typos

That's two pretty serious typos - especially that missing k. Thanks for spotting them; apologies for the errors.

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