All Comments on 'Fairview Avenue'

Really enjoyed this. It flows well and the thematic structure as well as the way you've expressed the sonnet form feels faithful to the Elizabethan tradition to me. A few lines seem a bit awkward and might be tinkered with, but I know it's always a challenge to get the meter and rhyme to play well together. Sometimes meaning or smoothness suffer as a result.

Just my opinion and thank you for the read.

interlock pattern here:

though scoff we might.

The scars of youth, and innocence we scorn

scoff, scars, scorn

a sonnet, does scream it, good, feel the material would have been better in another form, where rhyme is not a consideration

5ed