All Comments on 'A Night to Remember, and a Friend'

Good start, look foprward to the follow up

Very nicely written, very graphic. The ending leaves with a good cliffhanger, the only thing that I would suggest is proof reading the story. There were a few spelling errors, but not enough to distract from the story. A follow up, or a continuation of the story would be lovely. Keep it up.

The premise isn't too original, but it's a tried and true concept. There were a few grammatical errors, but the concepts overall were clear.

My big gripe is this was too short to justify being a "part 1". You need more "action" leading up to the cliffhanger. This sort of thing makes the reader feel cheated.

Opinions differ, but to justify splitting into chapters I think you need to have parts at least twice this long. Decent for a first effort, hopefully the rest is on its way.

I must have.missed that part. Not bad tho. 3 stars