by neo86
This one took it to far you make the couple your slaves but they only have eyes for there mistress wrong keep them together but unaware of each others happenings
I just finished reading part 1 & 2 of your 3 part story,and to be quite honest I won't waste my time reading the 3rd part because part 1 & 2 just plain suck, what a fuckin waste of time and energy of your part, your better of writing children books, that is to say if you are capable of doing that, but I have my daoubts about that too.
It's written well but it goes way too far. I think it's horrible how you write about two lovers forgetting about each other. You should make a story where the crystal gets smashed and their memories return and the couples reunite, because that's just terrible how they break up.
That was pretty damn hot, but I wish it was longer.I it was cool and different to read about a female hypnotist for a change, and I would really like to read more about Abby and Jemma together, perhaps some mff action~? Or making Mike watch especially an unhypnotised mike?
The problem here is that you didn't mark this as "Nonconsent", by the way.
Nice work! I'd like to see more.