by MaitreNuit
very nice!
Sex in the sun is simply the best.
I love your story
That's perfection multiplied with itself.
You created a great setting, your plot was clever and quite realistic, and you've quoted one of the best movies ever: Die Hard
It's already hard to handle two or three different characters, but you really managed to handle a dozen! Every one is unique and tricky, and you've really made them live.
You are really an awesome writer!
and have Sex with Sarah.
Its great written. I love it
A really brilliant story! Could have even been in the series like this.
You put more action-action in it, without missing the erotic-action or the passion, lust, and love!
Just awesome!
I like Chuck. Your story is great and full aof action. With love written
Sarah and Chuck , they go very well together.
Nicely written.
What a story!
You had everything in it: Action, sex, thrill, comedy - by the way, I loved the lizard - and passion.
I also loved the hints towards John McClane and the Die Hard films.
I was curious, so I goggled the weapons. Even my husband, who's an action fan, hadn't knew there were more kinds than only the one Kalashnikov AK 47.
You are very into facts and details, so your readers actually can dive into the story, and feel like being there themselves.
One more great story of yours.
Vicky from Melbourne
Congratulations on your huge success on the english board, buddy. You've earned and deserved it!
The setting, the plot, the characters, the action, the sex...
Everything is just fucking awesome!
very much erotic and humor
I like the way you did it!
I hope for morer
It's quite a hard task to provide facts and details without becoming boring or dull.
You've managed to show us so much only by supplying us with the details we need.
I actually had the feeling of watching an extralong episode of Chuck while reading your story.
Someone wrote, that you should send the stories to the creators of the series: Why not. Give it a try. Maybe you'll be discovered
Neither to writing nor to this language. You've said it best, when you said, you were rusty. Now you have shook the rust off, and shown real brilliance.
This story is similar to your first but at the same time totally different!
Still the couple in love is the center of attention, but now there is way more. they are with their friends and family, they face a clear and present danger, not only remembered, but really experienced, and get seperated in the process, relying only on their believe and trust.
It's actually amazing, how you've managed to lead a real dozen of completly different characters - including the lizard, one of my favorites! - over the whole story, without once losing one of the characters characteristics and always keeping their antics and quirks.
When I read this story, I instantly got reminded on the episode in the forth season, where the plot was quite similar.
I've seen that you couldn't have known this episode, while writing this story. You must have foreseen it.
I'm utterly amazed!
Bruce18
Part 2 is much better than part 1 , even more Sex and Action.
A pleasend to read you.
You write very well. The Story is amazing. Erotic pure.
I´m looking forward to read more from you
Once upon a time, I thought ill of the hype to do everything in english. I was born and raised in Germany and I do love the german language. It’s a pretty cool tool to express things, if you are fluent with it (which isn’t as widespread these days as one could think…)
Over time I learned english out of necessity. My favorite roleplaying game wasn’t even published in german. I had to learn and got used to reading in english. Yet I didn’t like the thought to read books or view movies in english. It wasn’t necessary, because in fact IF something is translated professionally to german the job is almost always well done.
But then I found Lit and after reading the half dozen really great authors on the german side (and numerous others in the range from pretty good to extremely awful) I started with english stories.
Imagine the wide eyed look of a young boy suddenly realizing that he just happened to wake up in candy land… ;-D
Masses of amazing authors and really good stuff to read.
And now you start to close the gap, Bro!
I bet the english speaking community would love to read all of your stuff. I think it’s just a little bit different from what they normally encounter. If only because it was originally written in another language and carefully translated.
You are one of the best on the german side and I have no doubt that you will find a place on the upper side of the ladder here. Because you just are that good… ;-)
Enjoy it guys. And wet your collective lips in anticipation of coming translations of his other stuff. I need be I’ll beat him into translating it… I promise! ;-D
Another 5 stars of course!
magnificent!!
It´s like a skript , no, much better than this.Sarah and Chuck are so romantic and sexy.
Are there more ?
The second chapter is even better than the first. It's really amazing and I loved the action. Featuring the others from the team in the same manner, Chuck and Sarah were used to be featured, was a great idea.
You have a huge potential, and I can't wait to see, what comes next!
Gerri
Amazing Fanfiction. I like it much. I´m looking forward for more.
Great story, great sex, great action... You fucking rock!
that´s really great!
This part is much more feeling, sex and action.
Very good translation.
I love it.
Find the mail adresses of Josh Schwartz and Chris Fedak, and show them your skills, buddy!
Your stories should be in the show!
Can't wait for the third part
MaitreNuit that is very very great. That is superlative.
i know the storie in german, but this is much better.
I guess you will find a publishing house very soon.
Dark
I used my pathetic germanskills to check it out.
You've actually written the german story even before any word was out about the plotting of the forth season! Besides minor details, you've really forseen the plot of the episode taking place in Costa Grava. That's awesome!
I really hope, you'll keep on writing about Chuck and Sarah and the others from Team Bartowski.
Have you ever considered writting fan fiction on other topics?
I´m spechless. The Storie is so great! Best i had ever read!
Great Story. Great Author.
Great continuation. Amazing Fanfiction.
So much the better than other fanfiction. I like it very very much.
Keep it up!
Dude, you did it! A totally independent fic about Chuck and Sarah with only a small connection to the series.
Keep on writing, and I don't need to see season five!
you are very talented. You write great Stories full of action, sex, humor, feeling.
The Charaters are very good described.
I can only Say:
He brought home the bacon.
It`s great stuff! Reading it makes a lot of fun.
It`s sexy!
Italians do it better, but here are you the great writer ;-)
Amazing work.
I like it very much.
Chuck is so sexy and you wrote it so very well.
I love it much!
Sexy and full of Action. Lot of Erotica. It is a perfect match.
i was sad when i reached the end. The Story is amazing.
You did it Maitre. It´s an honesty to read this.
Thank you.