by soroborn
hmm...i liked this chapter more b/c I think you did alot of what I hoped for in my comment on ch.1. You put in more details to describe what they were doing. I thought the scene with the whale was very nice. Still let them get down to basics...what job does he do? Tell us about his family. I loved the gossiping she heard. It's so true about people judging. It's exactly how it would probably be in real life. Sad really :) I have to wonder what she was asking in church lol I was ready for a birds and the bees talk. Keep writing and working on the same stuff.
I am really ejoying this story. The first chapter drew my interest and was quite good. The second chapter is fantastic, I love your work.Please keep the chapters coming as I am very interested in the rest of the story.My opinion is you are a fantastic author.
I suppose your handle should have been a clue - are you tall, redheaded and do you live in the desert? The real giveaway, though, is the quotation. But more importantly, the intersection of the human and spiritual can make a wonderful story, as Lewis shows. Your story is demonstrating a great deal of promise. Keep it up.