All Comments on 'A Very Indecent Proposal Ch. 02'

oooh is it 6:00 yet??

Going nowhere so far....3 Stars is another gift....

A good start but awfully slow. The first two chapters could have been one chapter with a page 2. I like her defiance and look forward to her punishment and breaking. Hopefully the night will become a delight of humiliation and degradation for her so she will be completely shattered but alive when he finally lets her go. Will he actually let her go or will he keep her a bit longer?

You think you are teasing, thinking the reader is enjoying the ride. While it truly was okay for your first entry - the second entry is going nowhere fast. It practically has me closing the book. One more, and you better grab us!

Your first two entries should have been one (combined)... don't lose your audience. Your writing is good - easy to read, somewhat descriptive, enjoyable - story just doesn't have a hook for a next read.

Are you going to add to the story or have you quit???

Oh dear, sorry but I’m out. Something like DD:LG really should be in the Tags and it’s a nauseating hard no for me.

I appreciate that writing isn’t easy and that what might seem like a lot on A4 is very little on a Literotica page. She had a very very clear opportunities to say no to all of this which meant it wasn’t Dub Con. if it was a genuine relationship the bullshit “no safe words” would be another hard no. It’s unreasonable and very unrealistic.

Best of luck with your writing. Tess (uk)