All Comments on 'Adventures of a College Cuckcake Ch. 01'

Good start. Perhaps needs a little tidying up with some of the sentence structure, and there is some mix up with the names (Phil or Gary, which is it?), but otherwise this was a solid start. Was especially interesting with it all being told from the Cuckcake's perspective.

Looking forward to reading more. Good job.

Fantastic set up. This needs to continue, and continue SOON!!!

Needs an editor. Looks like autocorrect was free to roam. But not a bad story.

Please continue -- can't wait to see where it goes!

amazing start! hope to read more soon.

Great start to the story,

Hoping to see more of Hannah dominating Donna. Maybe try enslaving Alice as well?

Good story, needs some edits. Keep it up.

It seems like this had the potential to be a good story, but I couldn’t get past the fourth paragraph due to numerous errors. Perhaps the writer should get an editor or look over their work much more carefully. Too bad, because it could have been nice to read.

Great story so far. Like others have said, it could benefit from some edits, but I can't wait to read more.

Definitely a hot story. Just needs some editing in a few spots. Like Gary is used when Phil is the man