All Comments on 'Amy Pt. 01'

Good story need major editing. Lot of errors

Definitely a better concept than most of the average 'in the future female slavery is the norm' stories.

Nice idea, well executed. Writing in a second language is really hard to get right, and you should look for a native English editor, preferably one who speaks Spanish, to help you improve. The Spanish is so that he can understand why you write in a particular way. The other thing you can do is write in the past tense. Present tense always sounds stilted, even when written by an English speaker, and here it just makes the constructions sound wrong. Please keep writing - you have a great imagination.

I hate this. A nice story spoiled by some transgender nuthouse.