All Comments on 'An Unexpected Reaction'

Third time I have read this one and still enjoy it. Could be another chapter about Celeste,

This is no doubt one of the best stories I have read on Literotica in all the years I've been reading. Well done!

This was the most amazing piece of literature I have read in quite some time, and I am an avid reader, I truthfully just clicked on the story hoping to a quick wank but this is beyond anything I could imagine. This story (minus the illicit sex parts) could easily be in any magazine or short story compilation. I hope you pursue your writing and try to get professionally published.

To bad Becky had to stray it could have been her and Jaces child. 5 Stars Plus.

I have not read it in a while but it always tugs at my heart strings when I think about what Becky threw away and all her friends that helped her do it. No Excuse

Now Amanda(Baby Doll) was starved for attention and just needed to be loved. She turned into a beautiful person inside and out. There is not enough words to say about her and her loving,caring ways.

Ron. Texas

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I liked it !

Hats off to you for writing such a brilliant story. 5 stars!

I've read a lot of stuff on this sight, but this story...i honestly think its my favorite. Simply amazing.

if you remember the scout motto. TK U MLJ LV NV

I would have liked an epilog or a second chapter even if it wasn't really needed. You write so well. I loved this story! You should write a novel just for fun, forget the professional bent, just for fun...

Could not stop reading this once I started...thanks for a top notch tale!!!!

Better story than some published books. I shall now read your other submissions!

It’s not “taking sides” to tell a friend that a spouse is CHEATING on him/her!

“I'm guessing everyone, especially Becky, didn't expect your reaction.” – I guess that’s why she felt safe in cheating on him!

I don’t know why the detective wants to protect him from the images and the wiretaps, since he doesn’t plan to reconcile anyway.

“I was trying to protect you” – Really? As Jace said, if he REALLY wanted to protect Jace, he would go to Becky and tell her to knock it the fuck off, that the next time he saw her with another guy he was going to tell Jace, and then DO IT!

“I knew he'd never tell. He needed Jace too badly." – That’s EXACTLY why he HAD to tell! By not telling he betrayed Jace and ruined their partnership.

“[Y]ou'd be amazed how eager some were to throw me under the bus.” – Apparently not eager enough, because nobody did until the P.I. talked to them!

I disagree with those who criticize him as a hypocrite for not telling Becky’s lover’s wife. While I would have told her, the situations ARE different. He doesn’t know this woman, and owes her no particular loyalty. The people who knew about Becky were his FRIENDS, including his business partner, and some even covered for her! Good point by Green117 that he gave a pass to those friends who simply didn’t TELL him about Becky’s cheating, only cutting them off when they essentially took her side by trying to get him to take her back.

Regarding his not telling about George and Carrie, he explains that he was going to tell but “other things”, i.e. his problems with Becky, came up! And he DIDN’T “help” hide it!

I’m also puzzled by Amanda’s threat at the end – he did NOTHING to encourage Becky, said ALL the right things, and certainly can’t control if she shows up again at a similar event!

A great story with lots of realism. No cuck here.

this is with out a doubt one of the best i have read. i am especially pleased that we know they had sex without the details. I will continue to read your stories.

Ed Grocott

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Bro i just love your work is so nice and so good please write more story like that

The writing in the first half was far better than the second half. More descriptive writing and you did very well to paint the picture of what he was feeling. His reactions were true to character and while there was some surprises, his responses felt natural. I would really liked to see that in the second half. You seemed to rush through it, trying to cram an extended time line into less words. We got what happened, but it was more of a narration; like someone telling a story about someone else, than a story of what he went through. I think the slew of undeveloped outside characters pulled away from the juicy emotional things he was going through. Fun read and will read more.

The first involving Becky, their friends and his divorce. The second about his love for Amanda, his new job and his new friends. The first gave me a cold feeling. The feeling one gets when a person you love betrays you. It's a horrible feeling that I wouldn't wish on my worst enemy (well, maybe my worst and second worst enemies). The second story was one of love, hope and passion. I will admit when she squeezed his balls at the end I might have had a violent reaction she would not have appreciated. Nobody messes with the boys. Do that and serious consideration will be given to terminating the relationship due to a lack of trust. Not even in the same room? A bit over-the-top don't you think? That kind of crazy gives a man pause to think about what he's doing and whether or not he can afford to go to sleep in the same room with a crazy woman. Well written. I hope to see more from you in the future. Good luck on writing in the real world.

Very enjoyable read; entertaining and absorbing without noticeable inconsistencies or contradictions. I was very tempted to give "5 stars", but then had to back off - the final gloss on the story was just a bit too "happily ever after", for one. Second, I missed having the "erotica" which after all, is the central billing for the "literotica" site.

4 stars; just shy of 5. thanks.

Yes I enjoyed the story and have read numerous times before and I agree it should be two different stories because they are nothing alike. This time I skipped most of the Becky and Jace because what she did to someone she loved and says she still does is unthinkable. She only worked the weekends so she just cheated at work. Bottom line it was just her nature to cheat what she told Jace at the end(they were ment to be together and she would leave her husband just say the word) and the friends and business partner who need enemies when you have friends like that. You have heard said before once a cheater always a cheater is not really true. I do think that Becky and Jace really loved each other but ?? In my favorites but do not read it as much as I used to. Just depressing what Becky did.

Ron Texas

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It was/is a great story. My opinion? It's better as a single story. It would have lost much of its meaning, and of its feeling, if it were cut up. You could have brought Aida back into the story sooner for a smoother infusion.

I gave it 5* for content, and another 3* for grammar and spelling. Your editor still needs more practice. Fortunately, the human brain knows how to connect sentences with errors into 'perfectly good' reading. ConGrat's 2 U, well done!

Loved it. Read it a few times. Very plausible. Shows there is hope. After getting screwed over and having the guts to leave a crappy situation, trust is a must. Age is not always a huge matter; love and trust is. Thank you for a great story!

I have read this story a number of times. One of my favorites. Good job. Thank You.

This story is awesome I thought for awhile that the reader before me was going to get his wish then he would have given you 5* but now I get to give the 5* instead of 3 or 4

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

My 6th time through and I cried this time too. This coming from a romance novelist too.

This story is one of a very few stories, maybe 20 or so, that I consider as the very best of the bunch on Literotica...... Considering the, literally, thousands of stories on this site, I hope qhml1 will not be disappointed with my comment. Brilliant!

A question; the story started out in the bar with the old "friends" trying to convince him to see Becky, after her affair. We then flash back to the beginning of their relationship, etc. Did I miss the point in time he was at the bar again?

Entertaining story though.

Ok, I have to start out by saying I rarely leave comments. I usually read stories that speak to my various little kinks and move on. I really enjoyed this story. I kept reading about it even after realizing that sex wasn't the major focal point. Kudos!

had read this one before and decided to refresh my memory ... yep 1st one of yours that I read ! and I am always amazed at the variety of explorations you go to Scotty

Great story,it really turned my crank especially the part about your Road Star. In 2003 my second wife bought me a brand new 2003 Road Star Silverado (the limited edition) and after 31 years of marriage I still have both of them and 4 kids 2 mine 2 hers and all ours.

And as I am currently reading my through all your stuff I haven't been disappointed yet,keep writing. !!!

Smooth reading with few hiccups. Definitely a "feel good" story that has a full range of emotions. Hope that there will be more submittals to come.

The subject line says it all. Just loved the line Amanda used when she tears out of the kitchen and calls Suit her fiancee. I laughed out loud. Thanks

I'm sorry the ending sucked! Like many authors they finish the story covering 40yrs in one paragraph I'm not saying that you covered 40yrs but as good did. Nice story other wise, Love you all! Bye.

What a fantastic story. I was a little bored after reading several sex stories and read this to cleanse my palette; so glad that I did. I found the early sections a bit heavy going, but your writing style compensated for that and it was a thoroughly interesting read.

Made me wish I was young and Amanda. Cost me a box of tissues.

WMM

I really have nothing to add to my earlier comments, but I want to repeat my feelings that Amanda's reaction to his running into Becky was WAY out of line!

He did NOTHING to warrant her reaction, and her threat was completely unreasonable, given the inability for him to control where Becky shows up.

I enjoyed it. It's quarter after midnight Christmas Eve, I finished it and I'm going to bed. I think I hear Santa on the roof.

I loved the story. I usually avoid "Loving Wives" because they're downers and about the pain and anger, but this one pulled me in. I really liked how it went from Jace and Becky's woes to Jace and Amanda's love. As the ending neared, I expected either Becky or Cindy to show up, as Becky did, but I agree with the others that Amanda's overreaction was not believable. Jace was very clear in his rejection of Becky's offer.

re: "Amanda's overreaction"

That Amanda is near psycho level jealous is well established in the story.

It was funny. And both of them are in agreement. And there are pregnancy hormones involved. It seems to fit their relationship. (He was the one who grabbed her & spanked her before they were actually together.) Lighten up & imagine the next scene where she kisses them all better.

Forget all those 'no-hopers' who just want to find fault. I thoroughly enjoyed your tale.

Keep up the good work.

Incidentally, this is about the third time that I have read this yarn. Thank-you!

Loved it.

Great story with its ups and downs.

Great ending too.

Despite your suggestion of having this be a two chapter story, the way it turned out was excellent. The transition between B and Amanda was handled gracefully and effectively.

It was interesting to see your final treatment of B. She obviously had not learned a thing and was still untrustworthy. She had cheated, lied and got caught, cheated again and lied again and got caught again, and was willing, even eager, to do it again to her current SigOther. Some people just can't learn from their own mistakes.

Amanda was a treat to follow as she transitioned from a disillusioned, homeless, and untrusting child to a responsible, caring adult.

Well written and thoroughly entertaining. Thank you for such a pleasant reading experience.

To the several commenters who felt Amanda's response to Jace's running in to Becky was an over-reaction:

It seems to me to be obvious that you have never met a pregnant, young Southern girl confronted with an older, more sophisticated former spouse of the man she loves. Been there, done that. This depiction merely scratches the surface of the level of jealousy and downright possessiveness that can surge to the surface. The author got it right!

Simply one of the most satisfying works on this site! Enough said.

One of the best pieces I've read here. 5 stars doesn't do it justice.

I thought this was a great story. Thank you.

(Or third) read. Still one of the best!

A little too long, but excellent

Don't let those who only spew negative criticisms get you down, the length was exactly long enough to get the story across - and in the right way.

Keep writing. 5/5

Just outstanding, one of the best I've read on this site. Couldn't stop until I finished. Very real, not just a fantasy. keep up the good work.

Just like a really good book-I could not put it down!

Excellent Read, I read it every few months for the enjoyment.

So one of best stories I've read.

...I focus on reading from the beginning to the end without taking a break. Thank you for writing such beautiful story.

"she grabbed my balls and squeezed. I thought I was going to pass out before she let them go,"

I got out of bed, retrieved a suitcase from the bedroom closet. "I'll be back in a week. You give some thought to physically abusing me ever again, and better tell the right story to our friends. I've put up with verbal and emotional abuse as a result of your temper. This was way over the line. I did nothing, nothing even approaching a cause to this behavior. It's time you took responsibility for your emotional baggage and cut this crap out."

Ditto, exactly what I was thinking, well said! Threats, ultimatums, emotional and/or physical abuse are NEVER appropriate in a loving relationship. The level of disrespect displayed SHOULD make anyone take a long look at their partner and perhaps consider having them seek professional help for their emotional problems. This one scene was enough to make me drop this from a 5* to 1*.

Just My Opinion, YMMV

Morgan DeWolfe

Love the way you put it together and set it up. From the minute Becky went on birth control for her new job to the way you tied loose ends up. Read over again several times to make sure I didn't miss anything. Love it when he walks into the bar to confront her I just wish the author had added something about her not having her rings on. Still could not figure why Cindy was covering for her. Cost her and Allen the wimp their lively hood. I could feel the fear coming from Becky when Jace came up to her. The ending to give Becky the final slap in the face when his new wife was pregnant. You know the gasp was Becky thinking that should of been her. Looking forward to more stories

I was married to my wife's youngest sister for a short time . almost 4 yrs later we ended up married for over 27 yrs before she past away the best yrs of my life . Becky reminds me of the youngest sister . ended up with the right 1

Aint the first time I read this, wont be the last.

You owe the guy helping you a case of wine

A really nice story; I've read it twice now, and am sure that I will be back to it again. I really liked Jace's personality - when he decided on a course of action, he didn't waver.

Have read this story multiple times, and it seems to get better each time. I just wish I could give more than 5*'s

Yes I know that the plot is a bit hackneyed but it is well written and does leave the reader feeling better than he was before reading it. Keep it up.

What a great story! I loved reading it. Again! Well done! Will look for more from you..9

Best story I have read here! Well done

A true masterpiece! I'm still a firm believer in One & Done as far as cheating goes, of course. Hubby did the right thing, getting out and on with his life. As far as the rest of the tale goes, it's a believable if unorthodox way of moving on. But hell, it worked! LOL

I'd really like to read about Aidra and her biker, if you ever feel like writing that one. Sounds like it would be a damn good IR romance! Post it in Interracial Love, and I'm pretty damn sure you'd make it into the Hall of Fame there, too.

Just an idea for you, Q. :)

I keep coming back to it. I just finished reading a real bad story with a real bad ending and had to come back to this so I could see how a good story line works Thanks. This truly is one of best I have read and makes total since

I liked this story a lot, except for the ending. I think I would have slept on the couch. I would have lost all interest after the pain experienced. If you can't treat your toys better, you don't get to play with them...

One of the masterpeaces on LIT,congrats and thx for sharing

5***** very easy stars qhml1

BUT too fucking funny...she didn't like alcohol, but she did like wine??????????????OK since wine is about 4x stronger than beer.....please let me know how alcohol is not involved?????????? WELL there is no alcohol in wine don't you think...ARE YOU STUPID WRITER OR DUMB? one is much worse than the other, answer to your doom. I await your answer. are you dumb or stupid? there is a right answer...YOU have GOT to be KIDDING me! just answer the question...

“I'd leave him in a minute if you'd take me back” – STILL a cheater!

I STILL don't understand Amanda's reaction - First, she's just heard him give the most heart-felt statement of devotion that anyone could hope for, and second, how can he control when Becky might show up at some event?

i'll admit i'm the kinda erotic story reader who usually goes for the electric thrill of something shocking and (generally thrillingly) painful.

i stumbled onto this amazing gem and it reminded me that there is another side to ecstacy. a side that's all about the simple happiness of love.

it's so very easy to get jaded in this bitter world.

the greatest gift is the joy of just waking up next to someone and knowing you're their's and they're your's and that's it.

thank you so much for this wonderful story.

anything interesting .. I reread one of yours. Enough flattery kid. Scotty

Second read. Our hero went from being betrayed by everyone he knew and loved to being embraced and loved. A loving, faithful wife and beloved by everyone they knew. If only life turned out this good. Excellent tale.

I think this is my fifth time reading this,and it doesn't get old!

I still have problems with Amanda's reaction at the end; yes, she's had a tough life, yes, she has a temper, but he did and said NOTHING to give her even a HINT of his being unfaithful, and for her to make that kind of a threat about something that he has no control over is unreasonable.

This such a good story I think you should publish mainstream! Your a good story teller! I don't say that light, good job.

Dave

Your story was interesting and enjoyable-as enjoyable as one can that started out so unhappily. I also enjoyed your writing.

What a great read!!

Loved it from the first page to the last.

this is one of if not the best story I have read here. It was so good I went back and read it the second time !!!!!! kept my attention the whole time, loved the storyline of happiness after being crushed. Great work qhml1

What a fairytale. Wonderful. It seemed like you told the end at the beginning and I liked it. That turned out to be barely the beginning.

Thank you for this.

T

East coast US

A solid 5 for a great story and I'm glad that you keep it intact to the conclusion, it made for a great read. Keep on writing - I'm looking forward to more of your talent.

Wow, what a read, love your writing style and your storytelling. I just finished reading it for the second time and it still brought tears to my eyes. Well done!

Todd and Jan?

I have made comments before about this story. Beckys betrayl and there friends covering for her the divorce and Amanda and Jace finding each other. Lets just say it started out with two people in love and ended with two people in love.Does that make any sence to anyone I hope so. In my favorites.

Ron

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

I can definitely see a sequel to this story and it's one of my favorites

5* from me

A classic I it's plotting and development. The development of it's characters, the treatment of action and consequence are exceptionally well done. The reader is led almost helplessly into experiencing emotional turmoil and is unwillingly drawn into making judgements about the behaviour and single mindedness of the central character. Altogether a job well done and a worthy talent in the making.

So far, my all time favorite. Just read this again. Makes me happy every time I read it.

I hit the "1" by mistake. It should be a 4,

Great

Thank you for a truly great story with well defined characters that we could actually root for... I would suggest editing the spelling errors better, but still one of my favorites.

My second reading confirmed my earlier readings of this author - a real talent in painting a picture that seems realistic and worth the time to view. It took Jace years to get over Becky and find and develop a feeling for Amanda. The relationship with her sister took a while to develop, but that's what life is all about. You have to take your time and if good things come, that's great. If not then you keep on looking. I'll have to revisit qhml1's listing again and see what I might have missed and what is worth rereading. worthy of 5*, in my eyes.

nice yarn :)

You made him very smart. I wished I could hold my emotions in check like him. I would have been in trouble for violence against four people. You have made me think,if I ever get into a situation where thinking will serve me better thinking it will be. Thank you! Great story.

I suspect with nearly 300 comments, there's not much else to add. Good on ya for letting a stand-up guy (and every other character who deserved a win) to win. Well-written stories like this are the gems some of us intentionally dig for for but so rarely unearth.

As good as the first. Five Stars again.

The story is a great read but picturing the main character as a good guy is kind of funny.

I'm sure all of us have, and have our favorite stories and authors with a bit of cult following (StangStar, Slirpuff, Papa Toad, Vandemonium--read his for the jokes at the end if for no other reason, Aussie humor is priceless) and having said all the preceding comments:

Best. Story. Ever.

Just sayin'.

Brendan aka Shadowjack17

Sows how holding your principles one can win through. Enjoyed the story very much.

Great drama, romance, real people, real attitudes, true life scenarios. ... I could go on ..... I loved this story...... easy 5 *.