All Comments on 'An Unexpected Reaction'

Thank you for the very wonderful story. I look forward to reading more of your great stories.

Whether it's in the mid to late thirties or early forties Amanda is going to start to wonder what she missed. It happens so very often to be expected.

Great story, thank you for this.

Definitely my favourite of your stories.

He made a mistake marrying Becky, who he already knew was too fickle and flirty for her own good... he said as much after their first date. Their meeting at the end was interesting, because it showed she still hadn't changed years later. She had no loyalty to her new husband and would have cheated with Jace in a heartbeat if he'd agreed.

Amanda was a really endearing character and it was great the way they helped each other get over their troubled past. 10 years isn't much of an age gap; the naysayers whining about it being unrealistic couldn't be more wrong. He was in good shape and had a successful career... a guy his age could easily date a girl in her twenties.

The flow of the story was better than having it broken apart.

But, you might have gotten two 5's instead of one.

; )

I don’t give very many stories a five but, in this case anything less from me is not fair.

So a five star rating is what this story deserves.

I know how others want the story t o go. But think for a minute. He never enabled anyone else to cheat. And Amanda coming from where she came from Would not cheat on him if she wanted to. Think about character and Amanda has it in spades. The system is screwed up...making the kids in it screwed up. But the truly good kids shine. Want examples: Elanor Roosevelt, Tom Monaghan, myself. Oh and the Eagles qb who had a falling out with Terrel Owens. Who had the character in that situation?

Excellent, really enjoyed your story, the plot, the characters, the happy ending. Other than the divorce, there was no real nastiness, no cruelty, lovely. What a change to see a man of principle prepared to stand up for his beliefs. Thank goodness he didn’t give Becky a third chance: she would have done it again and again.

I give 4*. The story was great. I read it in one two-hour sitting.

But please find an editor. The formatting, particularly in dialogue, was difficult to follow. I found it hard in many places to understand who was speaking.

It's conventional that, when paragraphing dialogue, to begin each paragraph with a quotation mark but to omit the one at the end if the next paragraph is spoken by the same individual.

The spelling errors were distracting, too.

But, I read the whole thing! The plot was smooth, the characters fairly-well developed, and was overall a great read.

Thank you!

great story, sad at the beginning happy at the end. Women, who can understand them? Complex beings.

Great story!!! Had everything I like, cheating whore wife to absolutely faithful wife and family.

Super great story. I’m a little prejudice as I’m prone to see things black or white, right or wrong. Excellent read.

3rd time reading it still great

Still hitting a 7* on my second read.

There is nothing to say but ask "WHEN will the Hallmark movie come out!"

Hooyah, Salute to a true 'Master-of-the-Quill'!

I stopped reading after like the fourth paragraph of the second page. The protagonist seem like a complete idiot. He knew secrets about his friends and never said anything, his excuse was something came up. Didn´t see how long his wife cheated, but maybe something came up also before they had a chance to tell him. Doesn´t say. Then he tries to make it sound like his job prevented him from calling. What? for two weeks? Really? I think what happened is this guy never thought it could happen to him, and when he found out that his marriage was no different from other people around him he couldn´t handle it. Not easy when the shoe is on the other foot. Right. Anyway don´t need to read the rest as I´m sure he got rid of his business, friends and workmates moved to another town or state found the most beautiful faithful wife in the world and lived out his life with more money than he could spend in a lifetime, while the ex wife and personel friends hit the gutter and lived a life of destitute. Same ole story.

Well written! I laughed and geared up a few times. 👍

One of the best on LW.

How can a story about divorce and love and all that kind of chatty stuff be nail biting? It's the good writing. It's detail and sparseness and humanity all wrapped up in one neat package. If you aren't thinking about writing a book, or planning, or doing...then you're a fool. Well done and I'll be watching for more of your work. Thanks.

I'm trying to see things from widowedidiot's perspective, but I can't seem to shove my head that far up my own ass.

My own divorce was initiated by my ex-wife's so-called friends. Those friends and others assisted in her attempts to cover up her actions. They gave her false alibi's and support. They gave her marriage killing advice. They leveled the blame on me for the implosion of our marriage. With friends like these, who needs enemies? A 22-year marriage destroyed by friends I don't remember ever standing by our sides and participating in our vows to each other: friends who had nothing to lose when our marriage ended in ashes and pain so grievous that I checked to see if I was bleeding.

really like the way you described all the small details. it really enriched the story

A favorite! So well done!!

I've read this several times, not sure if I'll read it again right now, but it came up on recent comments so decided ti take a peek. One thing that struck me was when he hit them with the hypotheticals, and they were all SO sure that they'd be forgiving. It's easy to SAY you'd be forgiving when you're not really in the situation, it's not really so easy when it actually happens to you.

The first 3-4 sentences were so chewy, I didn't go any further.

Good story however it mentioned he had his name Jace because his sister couldn't pronounce his name right then his mom says always wanted a daughter one of the few inconsistencies other than that it's great story, well I thought the Becky Part rolled on a little bit too long but other than that good story.

Of course this is in my favorites, as are you. I guess I sound like some fanboy, but I’m 73 years old (yikes).

Thank you

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I read the story a second time. Nothing unique, but well done, and I enjoyed reading it the 2nd time as much as the first. 5-stars.

Some parts I felt were elongated but I enjoyed it!! would love to read similar stories like this

Great plot devices to accomplish what never happens in divorce cases in real life. So much betrayal in this world gets simply rewarded, using the husband as the forever ATM cash device. Great that the plot had jail time legal leverage to accomplish an uncontested divorce.

With private investigators, good LEGAL video footage and Good Laws, ( I think Massachusetts of all places still has divorce for infidelity and adjusts the payout to the unfaithful spouse ... where the money is concerned this is really a business partnership, as such each partner can assume unlimited liability for the partnership with joint liability, i.e. debt. ) the faithful spouse can cut the bond and not get hammered financially for the rest of his life.

Things happen. Divorce happens, a lot. Better to bankrupt yourself temporarily with private investigators than to be a financial slave to somebody else's new chosen lifestyle. Probably why there are divorce law practices focused on strictly the man.

So this is a 5 star story in a not really vengeful -btb- genre, that accomplishes With good character development and plot devices, what most men never get in divorce proceedings. When a high status male gets betrayed and it's ugly, it's nice to read a story where things worked out for him.

Well paced and a satisfying read.

Good story and well written.

A story of two parts... not entirely sure the second part was needed, except if you really need a happy ending.

I liked the male protagonists reaction to betrayal. I much prefer it to the vengeance espoused in many other LW stories. Move on as quietly and smoothly as possible should be the watchword, and dropping any questionable 'friends'.

Well Done

He could have been kinder to first wife. I don't know of a real excuse for a cheating spouse but I do believe in forgiveness. Then there is trust! Also he would not have met his second wife.

Read it again and it is as good and entertaining as the first time.

He told his boss that his sister shorted it from JC to Jace what happened to the sister he said mom always wanted a daughter well I thought she had one the only problem I have with the story it was awesome other than that.

on this website.

Never stop writing!!!!!

I just finished my 4th read. Never gets old. Love it more each time. The Bear approves.

The BEAR

Loved the story, gave it 5 stars

First part was a good story, a bit of a downer throughout but great setup for the second half.

Second part I was so into that I completely forgot about Becky, Aida, Allen and Cindy.

Finished strong, I would've liked to know what happened to Allen and Cindy, also maybe a rekindling with Sandy and Tina.

Just brilliant. Read it in one go, it's 4am, and I can finally go to bed.

Perfect in every respect.

H

i seem to post comments about rubbish stories and (sadly) authors but regularly read this story again to remind myself of the hidden gems that are occasionally submitted for our perusal

to write an LW story without all of the usual LW plot cliches. Some writers wite and plot badly. Others write well, but resort to tired tropes and cliches for the plot. Only a few write well and take the time to come up with interesting, novel plots. This is one of the best of LW.

I usually feed these stories for the strong sexual content. This one read like a novel and is far more than a prurient read.

This was beautifully crafted. I am going to search your stories to see if you gave Aida and Robert a story of their own, but if not, I hope you consider it. I wish I had the patience to learn to spin yarns this well. I enjoy your writing. Thank you for sharing.

I thoroughly enjoyed this. Keep up the good work.

mistakes, I didn't see any, so they weren't serious or noticeable. what a story, im 60, had tears in my eyes a couple of times, I know there are people out there with very similar circumstances, great story indeed.

Keep Writing you have a beautiful way with words you have a great knack for telling a story it flows like a quite babbling brook slow and steady you keep turning the page and hoping it never ends

can't wait for the next story ;)

Thank you for writing this!

One of the best Loving Wives category story. If I was Jace, I would react differently. I would hurt every each of them. Actually, in my real life, I don't trust anyone. Because everyone who is around me does it for their good. No one ever thought about me yet. Even my ex-girlfriend. But if I ever had a girl like Amanda, who does love without exceptions, it would be my life-changer. Still struggling. Maybe single forever. Men, you would have urges, and even fantasize about other girls/woman. But don't ruin a happy life. And woman, don't destroy yourself.

I usually don't read 'loving wife' stories. I hate cheaters, and most of the stories I've seen in this category are more cuckold, or cheater wins type stories and I hate that. I stumbled onto this one from the similar stories at the end of a romance story I read. I'm glad I gave this a chance when I saw the category, Nice job, and thanks for sharing.

Keep writing like this with a touch of positivity and love.

Big mistake.

Great story. I'm a grown man (66) married 45 years to an angel. Everyone in this story got what they deserved. Keep writting.

I want to begin by saying there's a great story. You gave enough detail so you knew what was going on but you didn't give too much he got bogged down in the details, good writing. Don't quit keep going.

About the subject: trust and commitment

that is one thing people don't focus on anymore or commitment when you commit to something.

Overall it went the way I thought it would or hoped you always hope that they get back up on their feet move forward some can't some never do

the husband: I feel he had every right to do what he did she broke the trust and the commitment of the wedding bells and not only once but twice. His friends were not as friends they were as guilty as she was for perpetrating a fraud

the first wife: she deserved everything she got and more she relied on friends to cover for her cheating but more than once and she had no trust or commitment everything that came out was about her not them example 'I will do anything' I've heard that so many times

Headbutting the service it had to come home my six-month deferment to take care of his cheating wife and then fly back overseas the finishes three year commitment wasn't going to month and she had five lovers BITCH

I feel anybody that you cannot trust further than arms reach or is not take a commitment like marriage vows very seriously is not worth the other person's time the cheater should be treated just like he did cut it walk away is one thing get away with it will always come back

Your writing style is great I love it keep writing and don't let anybody put you down because it's not them that matters it's only you are you happy with what you're doing and if you are keep doing it put words on the page to make a story

This is the best story I've ever read on literotica. Absolutely awesome.

I really loved the story.. BUT...it really erks me that you authors write your protagonist with intelligence and maturity EXCEPT when it comes to relationships!

Becky was a selfish cheating Cunt from the beginning and he knew it, so he should have suffered more for his mindless choice to take her back and then marry her. He should have just killed himself at that point. It was an okay recovery but no pain for Becky. She just found an even bigger sucker. Glad he ended up with Amanda. And wow! He had some real spineless friends. Nice to read how he just cut them off. I did think it was a little long winded with too much detail on meaningless things but overall an okay story.

Just read this again. It is still a really good yarn and I enjoyed it even better!!! Thanks for penning this one!!!

Very good writing and a feel good story,more romance than loving wives which is good. Keep writing.

Love it!!!!!

This is a great story, a bit longer than I expected, but certainly worth the read. Have got exactly what he deserved, a happily ever after life, but Becky deserved to suffer a more fitting fate.

One of the best stories. Not only was the writing excellent, but you are a master story teller.

Such a wonderful and loving story. It was well written with a great story line, and then the happily ever after. Well done, 5 + stars.

To think there are woman like Becky in real life is scary...a woman like that can turn a man into a cuckold. Anyways great story i enjoyed it.

The threat to his manhood at the end was totally unnecessary as he didn’t initiate contact with her and had no idea she would be there.

THANK YOU FOR AN EXCELLENT STORY!

Great, great story. Great job!

And a nice, hot sex scene...that was well written. Really enjoyed it. Will have to get my wife to read it.

Looking forward to reading some of your other stories.

Jace got what he deserved for taking Becky back after she went out with another guy, dancing with his hand on her ass, kissing him and lying to Jace about it. I found it hard to be have any sympathy for him or to identify with him after that.

I used to live near a woman who played on her hubby he must have taken her back 4 times, In the end she got pregnant by another guy so he finally woke up and dumped her.

This may be just a story but there is a lot of truth in there as well especially in these modern times because the generations now seem to hold no value in marriage vows and certainly don't seem to have any real love for anyone other than themselves.

A lot of stories are too long I’m not complaining about this one. A lot of information is needed for this story to work and work it did.

One of the best stories on this site. Qhml1 you are one of the best writers out there. Please continue your work. Thank you.

Some of the finest writers ply their stories at Literotica, Qhml1 is certainly one of the best! Thank you and others like blackrandl1958, hooked1957, oshaw, and JPB just to name a few for years of entertainment. This story IS one of the best.

I read and re-read this master piece several times because it's so good. Still one of the best LW stories ever written! Qhml1 is one of the most amazing authors on Literotica. Please finish your "Rocky Racoon" story.

An absolutely fabulous story keeping your attention for all 9 pages and rooting for Jace throughout. One of the great writers here and always a delight to read. Loved the reference to Betty Bang Bang Burke.

This was a good story. Did not like the last section where she squeezed his boys. NOT good! NOT cool! NOT what a loving wife should do!

This is absolutely one of the BEST stories on this site. Not just Loving Wives, but ALL of Literotica. It made me think of something a student said to me once: "Age, is just a number." I have to admit that I was pulling for Amanda from the moment she was introduced into the story. Hope she got her girl. But, don't squeeze the boys...not fun at all.

I like how the cheating wasn't really a focus of the story and instead emotions and effects were. Other stories tend to go in cuck territory with the number of passages devoted to that...

The ending was funny, I was unsure why he wouldn't tell Amanda that Becky was his ex-wife but maybe he wanted to avoid the awkwardness. Loved that ending.

I still believe that any story so good as to warrant multiple readings warrants bonus stars . . .case in point! If Q could write a little faster maybe I would't be reading this for the third time. Thank you for your stories!

One of the best stories on the site. Definitely in my top 15.

Thank you for a great story.

Very well-written! I always love when the story is expanded upon and deals with the ramifications of a breakup rather than focusing on the breakup itself.

Very refreshing turn about from most of the stories out there

Thanks again

Soooooo much wrong here, as far as storytelling goes ...

(1) Too much emphasis on Jace and his Big Man ego. I was pretty unimpressed by his robotic, methodical, hard-ass response to the whole thing. (And what kinda douchebag goes by "Jace"?)

(2) Why the references to the "evidence" (the red folder, the video, the DVD) if we're not going to see what they actually contain? If the author is gonna introduce a plot device, then develop it, for Chrissake.

(3) Same thing: How exactly *did* Becky's friends assist her and conspire with her? How difficult would it have been to give us examples? If you're going to reference that point more than once — as if it's especially important — then DEVELOP it.

(4) "Part 2" (what should have been Part 2) had no conflict, no commensurate resolution and hence no redeeming value. Reading that constituted a small piece of my life that I can never get back.

Two stars. Pass on this one.

I appreciated how much life experience was woven into this submission. The plot is unique enough to be considered for development into a movie script. As one who went through divorce as a result of my wife's infidelity, I appreciated the way Jace dealt with the experience...not because I responded with the same detached coldness, but because I understand the need for emotional self protection that comes when a person experiences such intimate betrayal. This story is a gem.

American fries up North and they need to be sliced thick the same way fries should be. Not that thin sliced, shoestring crap and yes, fried. I wasn't too impressed with the rest of the new menu in general either but it's my only disagreement with this fine piece of work. Signed: BTW

I gave it a five. It was a very good read, but, it really should have been two stories, I think. My one objection to the plot is, why he didn't find out why. He wouldn't speak to her, listen to her messages, or have any other communication whatsoever with her. For, he was too severe.

I don't think it is too big a compliment to say you write a good story. The plot, the characters, with their ups and downs of life that we all experience. I feel I already know Jace, which is to down to the way you write. That ,and the belief that we all want to be the person 'that does the right thing'

The say that there is a book in all of us, it is definitely in you. Good luck.

Good job expressing the vitriol. Hope it wasn't from experience.

Absolutly amazing! Nothing more needs to be said. I would give this 10 stars if I could.

One of the best stories that I've read!

You are a great writer!

Thank you for the SUPER story!!

Hated the ball squeezing at the ending! Squeeze a man's balls for no reason, why wasn't she kicked to the couch for a few nights?!

Was the ball squeezing the unexpected reaction ? :)

This time the imagery in my mind was in full living, breathing, spectacular color. You have a way with words. Sometimes incredibly tender, then bawdy, then spectacular.

This was two great stories in one. Absolutely wonderful.

Thank you for sharing!

The story is very good, there's a great mix of romance, revenge and hate all over. But the ending part is a little bit let down. Amanda seems to forget who takes and made her. Definitely a five star rating.🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

this is the fourth time im reading this story. still love it.

You did a great job. I like the beginning and the growth of your character. I believe I have now read it 3 times and still like it.

I have read a lot of Loving Wives stories (A LOT). This is the only one which made me cry.

This is a remarkably well written story that explores the dynamics in multiple relationships, some that endure and some that end. Nine pages of reader satisfaction are brought to an abrupt halt by the conclusion of the story. It is ridiculous for Amanda to be anything but pleased by and grateful for what Jace says to Becky at the awards dinner. Instead she feels threatened by his contact with his ex-wife, a clear indication of problems involving her self-esteem and her belief in their marriage. That is worrisome at this point in their relationship.

The fact she feels entitled to cause him physical pain by squeezing his testicles is an outrage. Jace made a serious mistake by not calling out her assault and rejecting her overall reaction to the event. It might be instructive for him, while smiling of course, to painfully twist and pull on her nipples the next time she disappoints him. I doubt she would see it as playful teasing. Indeed, she should not.

This is a realy good story so much so that I read it again. Thank you for your time and the story

Great Story . But I did not like the ending

That was a wonderful story and I'm so glad I found it. I can't wait to read anything wise you've done.

why he didn't have the cop brother-in-law and soon-to-be-ex-wife prosecuted for kidnapping. Granted, he wants to be done with her, but that's just being too nice. Their actions were a crime.