All Comments on 'Campus Visit Pt. 02'

Your tale displays a tremendous potential, with some polish this can be elevated, leading to any number of episodes.

There are but a few gliche's that migot indicate your thoughts overtaking your typing. An example is "A flip had been switched." Surely you see this one.

Another , "Lisa dived in between them . . . Please try dove." Seemingly minor both demonstrate a need for an editor.

Another suggestion, not my original but a very strong method record your text then listen to the recording while performing reading along. Blips will show themselves.

Your talent is marvelous, your thoughts demanding readers to participate, mentally, and enjoy simultaneously.

Please keep contributing. So many of us will follow your story/ies.

Interesting cause I feel she now cheating on both sisters now and in more in a tough situation

Like part 2 even more than part one

That’s become complicated in many ways now.

Where's the follow up ?. Lol. Please write more chapters this has a lot of potential story lines.....with a lot of hot sex.