All Comments on 'Charlotte's Tea Room'

Enjoyable, but an editor would help. No First Time experience here - the story should be in Mature. There are many incomplete sentences, and some sentences which need to be broken up with commas. "Steal food for the table next to you" probably was meant to mean "from the table". "had been treated quite unfairly and sometimes to the extent one might have said "unfairly" is odd - one would expect a different and stronger word in place of the second "unfairly". Lack of editing doesn't bother some people, but for others it ruins an otherwise memorable story and is marked down accordingly. Please keep writing.