All Comments on 'Come For Me'

fucking erotic

2nd person narrative should only be attempted by extremely experienced writers. This was a good story completely decimated by a horrendous narrative choice.

Clever premise.

But rushed.

Pretty much lacks tension. Just rushes ahead.

Needed to slow down. Needed many more details of how nipples were being licked and sucked.

Could have used, prhaps, some playing with her pussy -- especially while she was sucking his cock.

Four stars.

It was fairly enjoyable, but the blurb was misleading. It's pretty clear that, while you let your husband play with her as well, you brought home the pet for you, not him.