All Comments on 'Dating Site Surprise Pt. 01'

Good Start! Now who will he meet?

If you met in high school why did you have to move to be near her family? Why couldn't you stay where you were and your family help with the baby?

Part 2 is up. This is a true account of my experiences

Agree with Blue Rowdy, Startes good but ended very quickly. The title was/is a bit deceiving) not what I expected

The story itself is good, but you don’t have anything closely approaching a finished product. There's not really any dialog per se. You narrated through all of it. Maybe your Community College offers a free introductory writing course that you can attend.

This needs a lot of polish before I can give you a higher score. 3/5

Needs, uh, needs some work, pal.