All Comments on 'Eliza & Family Holiday - The Journey'

Couldn't make it halfway through page 1. Grammar is horrible. Get an editor or learn how to write.

"Then he pulled her on the side and, after a brief hug, he rolled up her top and started sucking on one of her tits, not even bothering that I was there but God her side boob looked amazing."

Okay, so the family is all gathered together and the boyfriend starts sucking on the sister's tits right in front of Mom, Dad, and brother as if it's perfectly normal?

I don't know if this was blatant or a continuity error. 🤔 But I couldn't sit through any more. Other parts of the story might have been interesting, but I couldn't bother to continue reading any further to find out. 1/5

I liked the no taboo thing in the family. The brother could wait a little more for fucking her. And i think you could make the girl more kinky or maybe add some roadside action too. Overall i loved it and hope to read the next part soon.

I really like that your story took me along with you. I think good story telling takes you there meaning you can envision it like if it were on screen. Even though I wouldn't want to sleep with my sister, I found myself turned on and was intrigued by how different your family is. It left me wanting to hear more and know more.

I would be waiting for the next part

I absolutely loved the story. Made me hard and horny. It's great that the family are so open minded that pretty much anything goes. Sounds great fun.

Very long but I kept reading until the end. Very hot.

I hope the car breaks down in next part and there's some action including force

I have always fancied going on such a road trip.

The family of my ex was almost like the one in this story.

The good thing about your story is it felt like watching it on screen infront of me instead of reading

Some water sports could have added more naughtiness to it.

Can't wait for the next part.