All Comments on 'Family Matters'

I hope you don't mind some constructive criticism; I only want to help, and people here can be brutal. So, it's an interesting story, but I'd suggest maybe some editorial help, or at a minimum some focused proofreading. (Who's Pauline?) Also, adding a bit of normal hesitation would make this a bit more believable. Nobody thinks any of this is odd, that the whole family just has sex with anybody, anywhere, anytime? I hope these suggestions help. Thank you for submitting it for all of us to read!

Not bad ... who is "Pauline"???

Well, that ending is like hitting a brick wall bringing a good story to abrupt & crashing halt. I guess i missed out on Pauline, somehow. I hope there is more to follow. Because of that it's a 3☆ for me. Maybe it can improve

You need an editor, this story was very hard to follow.

That was a hard read. The story feels just emotionless. It's "this happens, then that happens". Suddenly the MC has to wear women's clothes but is just fine with it. The wife screws around and he's like "sure, whatever". It's worse than those RAAC stories in Loving Wives.

Yes, I do need a personal editor! As a publisher and author myself I have several proof readers to check copy and advise on content. For obvious reasons this story was for my eyes only. Self proofing is not a good idea because of speed reading which can miss the typos. I also broke my own rule of having a cooling off period before each read through. All references to the original Pauline should have been changed to Linda.