All Comments on 'Fun with Marilyn Ch. 02'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

You need an editor big time. Other than obvious typos like pasted for passed, you had words that made no sense in context, like demising; that should be either deducing or surmising. It took away from the story.

I like the raunchiness and would like to read more of these debauched characters but please get an editor.

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