All Comments on 'Gemma Sells Herself'

This desperately needs a proof read

This writing is really awful and terribly organized. The plot timeline is all mixed up and can't even tell what's happening.

Has potential, but as it stands it’s impossible to read and difficult to understand. With basic tools like Word/Google Docs, you could catch 70%, add Grammarly and get to 85%. Add a proof reader or better an editor, and your story could turn into to something good. Getting to 30 stories without sorting the basics is a sad waste of talent.