All Comments on 'Grave Cruelties'

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Wow. Another fantastic story. Keep it up. I love reading your stories....5stars

Very well done. Another great story.

A great story. Very powerful. All I have is contempt for Rebecca and Frank.

Why is man forgiving the stupid hoes in his life, he should have cancer riddled hoe off a roof

5 stars but still heartbreaking, from a writers standpoint it was masterful , you created an honest man , a unknowing daughter , then the snake couple the two heels that everyone wants to see rot in hell. Then his sick wife who was dieting and possible out of her mind during the last years of her life that was manipulated into a fling by the whore portion of the snake couple. Then obviously you wrote a very realistic after math. On a personal level I wish the wife would have come to her senses. Ty if that happened the story wouldn’t be the story in front of us. Morally the main character is the only one in the right , the daughter just kept pushing but when the truth came out she realized the snakes were snakes in my opinion this sets her in neutral territory morally . The wife is hard to gauge how much of this was the serpent best friends manipulation , her own desires and her illness for that I can’t really fault her but I can’t justify her. Actions either. Finally I lump the two supposed best friends together. But destroyed a decades long friendship and destroyed a marriage in one night. Both are manipulative and scumbags. I applaud the Mc for realizing this and blocking the male best friend out at the end,

Oh my god, man, you did it again. Thank you, it's brilliant.

Loved it, as always. 5*

5 stars. Superlative. Nice twists and turns.

Always best to let sleeping dogs lie!

5

Powerful story and tale of retribution. Not sure I bought into some of the reactions of the MCs, but they stayed within the bounds of reason. 4.6*

Very good! Full 5-star story, Nice twists and turns, to hold the readers attention. Also wonderful to see just how easy-flowing and polished, a professionally-presented piece can be, from a proud but NOT arrogant Author, who is neither "to precocious nor two arrogant to believe that as his own shit doesn't think" that he is practically perfect, and therefore far too much of a Clever-Dick to make a typo, or ever need a poof-reader! Well done! Thanks!

Great story. Only “issue” is wrong names at times. 5 from me

Machiavellian

Great job.

I had to go back and reread the confrontation in Jenny's apartment in light of his accusing Becca of being a slut. I kept thinking about his referring to Becca's pre-marriage trysts, but then the light bulb went on and I caught it. I really enjoy the stories where future action is setup by planted seeds, like at Jenny's apartment. It was incredibly well done here. Full marks and thanks for sharing.

Compelling story of love, betrayal and RAGE. NTH's main characters display what I call "channeled rage." It isn't just idle anger. It is appropriately directed at the betrayer(s). Well, except for "No Place to Go," that is.

Another 5-star story!

Another great story. In the end he was able to burn both of them. Well done.

Love it. That last little twist at the end that actually casts the main character in a realistic light as a person, vindictive warts and all, instead of a put upon martyr was fantastic.

Fantastic story. Thanks.

Another great story. Devastating and diabolical. Thanks for sharing! - gb

Another good story, thank you.

A sad beginning, yet satisfying in the end. 5*

Ha, ha -- great twist; obviously worth 5* for many reasons, but primarily because it was entertaining (and isn't that what it's all about?).

Excellent story. I'm looking forward to your next.

Lots of the comments about things I write pan them because none of the characters is likeable. And, here's this story. Paula was the most likeable of them. (Still a good read.) I do need to say that our MC is so deviously manipulative that he's as believable as, say, Superman. I ate up Superman comics as a youngster. Now, maybe Lecarre. D

Nice twist in your storyline. Really well done.

If a man dangles bat in front of a wife and she cheats, is he to blame for her cheating? Maybe.

But if a woman convinces her mentally compromised friend to do something that she would not have otherwise, she'd definitely at fault.

There are varying degrees of fault for the characters with what happened, but ultimately yeah the friendship was toast.

Well done.

husband's anger is every bit justified in that tale.

I was already going to give this story a 5 for destroying the friends marriage (though technically Becca did that, he just aired that fact) but the further revenge with the "boy toy" made an already great story better.

Well done.

Ouch! Good story with a savage twist. Well written and compelling. Thank you

Thoroughly enjoyed this tale. Especially the final reveal. 5 stars

NTH does it again. What a great story. Between you Other2Other and Vandemonium1 three of my five favorite Lit authors all reign from Australia. There must be some pretty incredible brain food down there. Needless to say 5 stars.

Enjoyed reading it, but sometimes these Uber-virtuous heroes give me a pain! Would love a twist where, after the confrontation in Jenny’s apartment the father seduces and forces himself on his daughter, fucking her into a mind bending orgasm!

Also, needed to reread this again, the names kept jumping around!!!

Well written. Thanks

Fuckin' A!

Love this!

Reminded me of another story where dying wife wanted to have sex with a black colleague before she died.

I liked that story better.

This story, I kept waiting for Becca's big betrayal and it never really came.

Nice.

5 stars

Complicated

Really good

Only lacks eroticism, and yet, is complete as is

Five for you

Powerful and well written.

Best story I’ve read on here for awhile especially the twist with the “young stud” at the end. Kudos.

5 per usual.

I think your bio about being a software developer is a lie. Your stories are too consistently great for you to be anything but a professional novelist.

The story was good. Begging for a vote spoiled everything. It went from a 5 to a 3.

Not very well written

Well written as usual but this one left a slimy feeling on the consciousness.

Great storytelling.

Quite an outstanding, well-crafted plot.

So simple but at the end it made things weren't as simple as it was thought.

The twist was/were in the secrets Frank is going to carry to his grave.

He set-upped Becca with that young pussy hound and subtly but slowly sabotaged Aaron's marriage.

If Aaron realizes what Frank did -- yeah, Aaron would probably kill Frank. Or not.

Nice job on Franks revenge on Aaron and Becca's lives @NoTalentHack.

Thank you for sharing this.

Another great story. However, I must be going completely nuts... (instead of only being half-way there!) because I swear I read this story a couple of years ago. Looks like it's all over for my mental capacity. LOL. Anyway, many thanks. Cheers.

Three main characters, all three unworthy of future happiness… Frank might be remarried, but in the aftermath is incapable of love….

Your name says it all. No Talent.

5 stars - and yes, this one was worth all the stars.

Good work - please keep writing.

As usual, brilliantly written.

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Frank got it perfectly right about Aaron. That slick lawyer should have cleared then”plan” with Frank…and he didn’t because he absolutely KNEW that Frank would reject it.

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Becca’s motivations were less precise, but maybe more nefarious. Her encouraging Paula was motivated by the hope it would translate into a romp with Frank….even though she must have known her chances were poor when she went over to Frank’s house on “the night”. Frank’s vengeance on her was awesome 😎

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Jenny — did not like her at all for some reason. Too accepting of the cheating for Mom. Too similar to Becca in demeanor….I don’t know….just got a lot of dissonance from how she was written.

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One small nit — Marylin was introduced to Frank by his daughter as someone she worked with. But not even a hint if she was Frank’s age, Jenny’s age, or somewhere in between. Would have been a salient bit of info I think….

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5 *****

This was a great, creative story. My only issue was that you switched Frank and Aaron several times. You really need a proofreader (even better, an editor) to eliminate these issues that grammarly and spellchecker won’t catch.

well written, of course.

I can't imagine the pain and anger I would experience knowing that my wife of all of those years had "cheated" on me with my best friend. I know you can blame the "friends" and the tumor so I am not saying anger directed at the wife but I am still saying I would feel betrayed and angered that my life with the woman I loved ended in that manner. Losing her is painful enough but to know that she was mislead like that and carried through the act where the last person to have sex with her was not me? Man, I would have committed murder. If there was ANY chance I could have stopped it, even at the risk of her being angry with me in her tumor controlled state - I would have. I would have had her watched and followed or locked up.

Well done as you got me emotional.

yet another great story, wonderfully written

Again NTH you rocked it! It’s just not your writing talent, but your story conceptualization that you bring to the table every time. You rank right up there with all the great ones that have donated their effort & time to posting on this site. 5*… Thank you!

I have to give it a 4.5, because the writing is that good, and so captivating. BUT, it's never really explained just WHY he let his brain damaged wive take another lover, even if it was his best friend who he trusted (he really didn't). He knew she was mixed up and should have protected her, not given in. 'She might have done it anyway' is no excuse.

That was a awesome ending! The MC is right about secrets, you want a secret kept you tell no one!

Brilliant story. Perfect, actually. The wife cheated, but was in a severely compromised state. The 2 assholes masquerading as friends get their comeuppance.

Keep writing this stuff

I would recommend a DNA test on his daughter, after her comment about "Uncle Frank."

I think you mixed them up more than that, but that one was pretty blatant.

I would have scored this higher if there had been any character in it to like, or identify with, except that poor innocent daughter. I hope things turn out well for her, in spite of the odds.

Another outstanding story.

And NTH once again knocks a tired LW cliché OUTTA DA PARK with unparalleled originality and.... dare I say ... believability!!! Well, somewhat anyways, enough to make an excellent read. Bravo again.

Four stars. The failing was that far too often you could not tell who was talking, due to the lack of first name usage. Also, there was at least one instance of a wrong name being used. Anyway, it interrupted the flow to repeatedly have to reread to try to identify each speaker. Again, four stars. Remember, a little proofreading by fresh eyes goes a long way. I expected better.

JPB

After reading this tale, I'm officially petitioning a change in your nom de plum from NoTalentHack to TalentedNonHack. Well crafted plot, well written story. If the protagonist's revenge was any colder, it would be absolute zero. 5 Stars.

Of the best authors on the site, this was an interesting story but a sad one.

I'm 77; have seen marriages disintegrate and old friends (and most of my family) die.

This story conjures up an emotional agony which I've never faced in 51 years of married life.

It's a tribute (as if he needs it) to NTH's ability to find elements of the human condition which cause us incredible pain--and present them to us in such a way that we CANNOT avoid that feeling.

Thank you...I guess.

MLJ

Jay, might have a better read in incest category

I loved the characters! So nicely defined, by context! Well done!

5*

Thank you!

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Be well!

Yes, my friend, the Bear loves it. & stars, because it was just so dam sad. It had to be. But it did have a happy ending. And I love happy endings. Tough way to get there, though. Good tale.

The BEAR

Righteous Indignation can make a man hard!!! 5*

Once again, you start us off on a fairly well-trod path and then take us in a unique and fascinating direction. That you are able to put real characters who have emotional depth, with whom the reader can emphasize, and surprising yet feasible plot twists in just a few pages is tribute to talent that few others on this site have ever demonstrated.

Some characters are easy to dislike. I feel for this husband.

As always, wonderfully crafted... kept me wanting more. 5* - in my top 3 writers on the site.

Well, I went and voted. Of all the writers on the list you won hands down. Seriously, most are cuckold writers. You are not. Thats what is swinging the vote in your favor.

Another one that proves your handle is 180 degrees out of line with reality.

As the story of the betrayals among these two couples unwind, the descriptions of the emotions are so perfect that as a reader. I had to feel the same emotions as the MC. That is the essence of being such a great storyteller...

...that you are able to take the reader into the story, and not just be reading about it.

Five stars of course...

As others have pointed out, the multiple mixups of names is distracting — I had to reread several parts of the story to figure out who was actually talking to whom. Normally, that would cause me to lowball a story. However, the cleverness and originality of the main story arc, the masterful way you conveyed the emotions of the characters (particularly the MC) and the satisfying twists lead me to give you all 5 * for this gem. Well done yet again!

Did you even proof-read your own story, prior to posting? All the name typo's really threw us off and killed the story impact.

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3***

Goes to show, so enthralled with the story, I missed most of the typos, I enjoyed it as ever.

Another good story, although a bit dark.That’s the reason I stopped at 4 stars. Of course, given the story premise, it couldn’t really be any other way.

I wasn’t complete in my first comment, do I apologize fir the addition.

Fiction, yes I know.

The MC, as a medical doctor, even though there are no specifics, did know that his wife was no longer legally competent to manage her affairs or make unquestioned life altering decisions, by the time Becca made her play. Knowing this, he still provided about as much protection of hus wife’s welfare as a soaked cheap paper sack when he was approached with the “question”. His “excuse” was he didn’t want an emotional argument with his wife? Get real, yet we’re expected to believe that her terful regret during her few remaining periods of lucidity was somehow better? Effectively a remonstration from his wife for his failure to protect her in her vulnerability?

Becca was undoubtedly a bad person, but I think the MC is more to blame, bordeting on evil. He knew his eife wasn’t competent, knew she was vulnerable to being influenced, knew that is what Becca had done, and yet he permitted it to all happen. That’s not protecting his wife, that’s throwing her to the wolves while dancing around the bonfire, while humming woe, woe is me.

A good ending for thus story would have had the MC kissing a train in the closing paragraph. IMO - YMMV

Good storyline. As others complained did notice some typos but I don’t expect perfect work! It is not like I am buying a product! I was entertained and the revenge was well done! All good

Please do keep writing and I will keep reading.

Good stuff here but could not always tell who the heck was speaking-had to go back paragraphs and try

to follow the convo again-while doing this I'm saying to myself why couldn't NTH write Frank said or Becca said-

maybe we are in the minority here but I couldn't always follow the dialogue.

Also Frank rubbed me the wrong way-something about his character-I can't explain it. If he felt his wife wasn't

able to make good decisions any more then just say no to her requests-just help her.

Dare

5 stars!

You never fail to follow through to the end of the story. I always like to know what happened to each character, especially the parties responsible for the abuse of cheating.

Not sure. Stretches believability Aaron wouldn't check with Frank prior to the dirty deed. But according to many responding to this story.........

It was not clear to me if:

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Frank knew of the affair before Becca came over the fateful night. If he dud, why didn’t he stop it?

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Paula knew that Frank either or both did not know and did not approve. Did she and Frank have even one chat prior to tne infidelity?

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How much time passed between the “event” and Paula’s death.

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All in all, a great read. Especially the way Frank got back at both Aaron and Becca. One more thing that bothered me: Jenny sure seemed to be on board with her Mom having a fling. Even if she thought Dad was OK with it….why when she thought she found out didn’t she get with Dad to verify?

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"how strange it was that the man cuckolding Aaron always seemed to make it as easy as possible to get pictures" How strange indeed! Not a bonfire of a BTB but a very entertainingly set up kick in the balls to Aaron. Paul Harvey would have been proud of your storytelling!

Has anyone else noticed the lack of comments on NTH's stories from the "inner circle"? You know them, the ones (and often the only ones) invited by their leader Randi to the story challenges, the ones who immediately jump in with over-the-top praise whenever one of the clique submits a story, no matter the quality (sometimes excellent, sometimes just paint-by-numbers, sometimes not so good at all)? Yet for of NTH's incredible body of work, which puts him in the absolute elite tier of all-time authors here, it's crickets from the cool kids.

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I wonder if they feel intimidated? They shouldn't (especially QHM1 and Laptopwriter, who are also top-shelf), as this isn't a competition, but their silence seems deafening.

Masterful.

Once again, your weaving of a tale did not disappoint. Five stars awarded, as well as both ears and the tail! :-) :-)

You certainly deserve the award for "Most Influential"!

I liked it. A bit confusing regarding the lying. Was it 2 lies, 3 lies. Did Becca do all the lying or Frank some too.

On another note, I really think a father and daughter ought to be able to openly discuss sex and their respective sex lives. She’s not a child any more.

I loved it and gave 5 stars to it. Yes, it's a sad tale that ends on a happy note, with a few plot twists thrown in for good measure. And the way you weaved it altogether was just brilliant. I still say you're definitely no No Talent Hack, but a very promising writer in your own right. I've said it before that I need to go thru more of your posted stories, and I still do. Thank You for sharing it with us. I really enjoy reading your stuff.

Just 2 little things:

- the MC accepted that his dying wife had sex with another man

- the MC didn't answer to her daughter question about what he would have decided if his wife hadn't had a tumor and asked anyway for a free fuck

This behaviour make the MC look like another idiot cuck husband, and this sounds no good at all.

Brilliant. 6 stars if it were possible. One of the best I've read here.

Well done! Good story.

Nope, not even a single likable character, not even his daughter. Vengeance delayed is vengeance denied... Even the dying wife was unlikable. Withholding the evidence of your enemy's wife's cheating is pretty good though.

Reminiscent of another story I read a while back called Rubicon dated 5/31/2023.

Aaron = Frank =Aaron…? Dual personalities?