All Comments on 'Hiking Sex (fm)'

Wrong category,

Do NOT write a story in single sentences - there is no flow in the story. This is an operating manual for an Ikea bookshelf

Stylistically

Tough to pull off, but you do it. Lovely short, breathless sentences full of energy and imagery. Captivating, you get the reader to feel your nipples, sense the outdoors, the illicitness of it all. Bravo, well done.