All Comments on 'House Warming Party'

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Simon_MastersSimon_Mastersalmost 2 years ago

Great story, but you need a proof reader.

big9johnsonbig9johnsonalmost 2 years ago

Overall, I liked the story but like the other commenter said get your stuff proof read before posting. All the errors made it hard to read and the anal scene was too unrealistic.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Definitely needs an editor. Hard to read in some places.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Hot story.

Needs grammar correction

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Great story

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