All Comments on 'Hypno-Submission Pt. 12'

Holy hell. Holy fucking hell. Mind control stories are usually hot in general, but the way you’re building this one is just… wow.

Excellent as always. I love the fact that you take your time over the 'seduction' element.

The way you take the time to have an explanation of what’s going on for the reader by setting up discussions with other slaves or even with their alter ego or other personality is a smart way to keep everyone informed while still moving the storyline along. Your chapters have been direct and informative while still being funny or silly at times has made this story so much more interesting and loads better. As usual I am looking forward to your next chapter. Thanks again for everything you do to get these awesome story out to us.

J.D.

Very impressive writing. I like how you are saving the best for last. I started with this one and read 1-7 all together.

It's fucking amazing! Please upload the next part soon!!

I'm a little confused, or maybe you left some stuff out?

Sin: "she had "Master's obedient slut" written in marker across her tits." that will take several days to come off

But Cyn never sees it on her tits, doesn't react to it, and then the next morning gets dressed in slut-ware and doesn't see anything???

Anyway, I loved it otherwise, love the internal tension, 5*

Awesome story! I await the next chapter with baited breath! :-)

when is katie going to her mom and trance her

Cyn would make a beautiful dominant whored.

And she wants revenge on her uncle.

But it was her upbringing as a “Good Catholic Girl» that got in the way.

The Master has already made her just a good girl. Sin )

I hope he recovers from covid and publishes more :(

Reading about Cynthia is like reading about myself! I love this series.

Did he really get covid? Its been 3 months since he published his last...

Wonderful penmanship! Absolutely love this story (99% of it), and really really hope you will continue with it soon! Please don't make us wait too long!

I just finished re-reading this series and love it all over again. I am really anxious for more.

I love to be a slave too

Can’t wait till we get more of this!

Good series. Hope to read more about Cynthia/ Sin and MB as well as Katie and Brenda. Does Katie’s mom ever fall for MB?

i need more

Please give us more of this it's brilliant

I think he died.

If you have any intention of continuing this series, just know you have tons of people hanging on every word. Excellent series, no one builds up like you do, it's great

Too Short -2 Stars Of course longer stories would have more editing errors. Instead of reading over the story, try reading it aloud and you might hear the errors. When proof reading your own work you tend to read what you think you typed and not what you actually typed. Alternatively implant your story into a HTML page and have the computer read it to you while listening carefully. Listen to what is said and not what you think it's saying. Anony Mous

Been waiting for more but guess you have moved on, still a very good story.

This is too good, it deserves continuation like always!! Hope to see more of the characters!