by HercSpartanos
That's a chopped up piece of cut and paste editing that needs to be fixed! Story is ok for what it is just fix the editing!
Serious editing issues. The story is pasted inside itself.
Past that? Hot in a wildly degrading way, for both sides.
Honestly really great despite the formatting mistake. Don't let that deter you. Try again, just proof read.
editing is much needed. first and last parts have been copied/pasted and put in twice. pls.