by CrazyTimesAHappenin
Totally un-fricken believable at least try to write a story that sounds halfway real, Jeez
You are building up all this sexual tension between dad and daughter and by now it's far beyond any plausibility that they haven't fucked each other yet. Even if they eventually do it, the payoff isn't worth the setup by now. Seven chapters of endless teasing (and it's getting repetitive) and he just came once in his pants I believe? He should be crawling on the floor in pain because of the most severe case of blue balls since the children of Adam and Eve said "Fuck it, we are going to do it anyway."
If you are going to write a story about a foreign county, at least know its laws.
The legal drinking age in Barbados is 18.
This is so bad. You started well, but now it's just terrible 😭😭. To many characters, so much teasing, and not fuck at all. 2/5