All Comments on 'Island Vacation Ch. 10'

God, this is getting hotter

Fantastic series! I hour it never ends! This chapter was just perfect!

Yes. Nice story, thank you. You are building it perfectly. Also, the anticipation of what he had included in the package. Cheers.

Just one word wow very hot.

This story continues to build up and is getting better and better. The imagination of this story had me flying.

All in all, a good series. But with each installment only being a few thousand words, it’s going to take f..o..r..e..v..e..r.. to tell this whole story. C’mon you don’t need to string your readers along like that. Just my opinion….🙄

Good series, well written. Looking forward to reading the next installment. Two things I noticed that could be improved are every once in a while you forget to put a word in like at or a or the, not a huge deal, just something to keep an eye out for when you edit. And like many writers on this site, including myself, you tend mix tenses.

Very good series and well written.