All Comments on 'It's Just Magic Pt. 04'

like the concept but the actual story is to short and the intro is too long for so few words.

Enjoyed how this is progressing. The chapters are too small. Whilst your chapters may be similar in size to chapters in published books, when reading a book would you read one chapter, then put the book away?

As others say I think the chapters are way to short. Not enough story right now to comment further but I like the premise and story so far. Many ways it could go!

Hm, the chapters are too short? Let me think on that a bit. Two pages every day for 4 days in a row (5 if you include the next chapter which is already posted) yields a rate of 60 pages in a month. Some of the best authors on this site might give you 3-9 pages once or twice a month, many post far less often! Whiners gonna whine. Next they will be harping on the main character not following the rules of physics as we know them...