by hopalong48
Soooo predictable, presumably the last scenes on the film consist of her and the guard dogs. Blackmail stories just don’t do it for me at all. It’s completely unrealistic there’s no way she would have been interested in sex at all that morning because she would have been sore. It’s a non erotic kind of pain. Tbh I skipped most of this chapter because the direction was obvious.
Not for me.
Tess (uk)
..a bit bordering on 'rape' for me. The character would most likely not have complied without being drugged. That's clearly non-consensual and belongs in that category.
Although I'd much rather she 'loosened' up with just a drink or two. That's still a little forced but not as rape-y as being drugged!
Also.. for pity's sake try and keep track of who is in each scene. Paul seems to switch places with Patrick at least twice. Maybe try naming them with different initials next time.