by Lord Ranger
This is basically a good story, and the over-the-top descriptions are top-notch - very well suited to the comic book world you create.
Unfortunately, I found the spelling and grammar distracting. Awkwardly constructed sentences and mispelled words, while not a great crime deserving the attention of the Knight Owl, do detract from what is otherwise a fun tale.
May I suggest a proofreader? Many online resources offer double-blinded (ie anonymous author/reader) proofreading of erotica. All this is just icing. Look forward to more.