by Pyro
This was a wonderfully written piece. Everything flowed together very well and it was quite creative.
I noticed a few typos as I was reading but it's nothing spell-check wouldn't catch.
All in all a good piece. I love the description of her anxiety at being trapped on the balcony naked! It was an especially good section because she was still very sexy even though she was no longer fantasizing.
Surprisingly professional writing style-reminds me of some teen romance novels.
"Cleanly" written for a large part, and very good flow. Very visual, which is important. One of the better pieces on the site.
Very interesting voyeuristic theme. I could almost see myself there!
Greetings, Literotica Reader!
This is one of the first erotic stories I ever wrote. I submitted it to various magazines back in the late 1970's and had it published in a slightly different form by a now-defunct "men's magazine."
Please leave your comments and let me know how you liked my story! A writer improves with practice and feedback, so your thoughts are very much invited.
Pyro