All Comments on 'Lost Girls Find Life Ch. 04'

by Billyslate

Sort by:

Newest First Oldest First

4 Comments

Anonymousalmost 3 years ago

Hard to follow. Needs a lot of work.

Anonymousalmost 3 years ago

Do you understand how quotation marks work?

Anonymousalmost 3 years ago

Please consider adding dialog to your writing. Exploring how characters converse with each other and explain how they feel will make you a better storyteller. This is not not interesting as is.

Anonymousalmost 3 years ago

Dude, please find an editor. These are rough. Well meaning, but rough.

Our Comments Policy is available in the Lit FAQ

Post as:

Anonymous

Billyslate@Billyslate

47 Stories

100 Followers

Enjoys Life And Life Experiences! 05 MAY 2024 Billyslate Will Enter A Story In the Crime & Punishment Contest! Releasing Soon: How Did I Get Here 05: Sequel: Reese. READ 1ST: Love is Where One Finds It Pt. 02 Ch. 01-02, then How Did I Get Here 01-04. Running From Lov...

Live Webcams 323 Online!