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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Hard to follow. Needs a lot of work.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Do you understand how quotation marks work?

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Please consider adding dialog to your writing. Exploring how characters converse with each other and explain how they feel will make you a better storyteller. This is not not interesting as is.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Dude, please find an editor. These are rough. Well meaning, but rough.

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