All Comments on 'Lucy's Nightmare'

I'm assuming English isn't your first language and that is okay. Probably best to find someone to do some editing. Try to keep using the same terms for body parts (don't switch between penis and dick/cock etc). Also more detail as to how she is feeling physically during sex is helpful. The story has potential once you add more info.

The grammar, spelling mistakes, overwhelming punctuation conventions, and lack of cohesive story demonstrate the worst of Lit submissions

Lots of grammatical errors to the point of being hard to read.

This could have been a good story with proofreading and editing

Are trying to write a story or are you just hanging around and you are very LOST.

Hi yes english isnt my first language and it was my first try of writing.

Now i am looking someone for editing and review but for now unsuccessfully.

No character development, no story really.

Well, average at best. Needs a lot more work on grammar and spelling. Too many times reading "kidnappers" when there is only one kidnapper and it detracted from the story. There is no detail on the rest of her rapes before or after her pregnancy test. How was she allowed to go to the bathroom? When was she fed or given water? Was she punished during her captivity? Was no one looking of her? What happened after she gave birth? Was she allowed to go home?

Unreadable. Even Chatgpt would do better. Sorry, but some basic editing would do a lot.

I'm assuming you're going to continue with the story. Not to be a broken record but try to get it edited better next time

Did an illiterate write this? Christ.

Your stories are fantastic! Honey It's Amalia, I accidentally deleted our correspondence on MV, can you write me? Amelisister

A lot of people are being very harsh, and I bet most of them only know one language. Keep practicing!

Awful. Truly terribly written and a terrible story in general.