All Comments on 'Madison Revealed'

Fantastic. Can't wait to see what is in store for her!

Yep! Don't stop now. We need more please.

Off to a wonderful start! I can't wait to read Madison's next steps. Thanks for sharing this!

You're off to a great start with her. Yes. We need more!

~B

Well written. One tiny grammar suggestion. Compound pronouns ( she and I, or her and me) are really easy if you think what you’d say if there weren’t compound pronouns. “I” is a nominative pronoun just like “she” , “he”, “we” or “they”. Nominative pronouns are often used for the subject of the sentence -for the ones doing something. Nominative is also used for comparison to the subject. Comparative verbs are “ like”, “equals”, “smaller or larger than”, “similar to” and so on. For example, She and he are alike. She’s like he (is). “She’s like him.” is grammatically incorrect, but a very common mistake. The is in the second example is understood and unnecessary.

Objective pronouns are used for the object of the sentence or the object of a prepositional phrase. For example, He fucked me. It makes a big difference to me. Objective pronouns are: “me”, “us”, “him”, “her” and “them”.

The story is so well told that the grammatical errors seem out of place. In my mind, I substitute correct grammar as I see errors to make it sound better in my mind. If you already knew all of this and usually follow it, please forgive this didactic comment.

It is what it is, I can't even follow what you just said but I appreciate the effort! I'm not a writer (obviously).

your story meets my sluttishness pretty favourably, thank you

An engaging start. I am looking forward to reading the remaining chapters.