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by PennameWombat

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AnonymousAnonymous6 months ago

Not bad.

But it was a little hard to follow at times due to the language and the speed it moved. Whilst you clearly wanted to portray the language and the excitement of the protagonists you should probably think a little more about the reader.

AnonymousAnonymous5 months ago

I enjoyed the search for ecstasy. Good work!

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Long-time writer of computer software, technical documents, papers and more boring stuff. Long-time pretend writer of fiction, erotic and other, but never put these latter 'out there.' It's time. Many of my stories take place in what I call "Mel's Universe," after the female l...