All Comments on 'Making Amends Ch. 01'

Nice beginning. There was one section which was distracting:

"GEORGIA

George's life has been tough, but good. She had achieved many things in the professional realm, and was extremely comfortable, living a fairly luxurious lifestyle. as one of the top real estate Asians in Birmingham, Alabama. She had made many amazing connections, lived a very full and fulfilling, social schedule, and wanted for nothing. Except, family.

My brother Jeff."

Not sure if that was an uploading error or not. Regardless, a good beginning to the series.

To short

Great start, love to see where this goes from here. More please

Mmmmm... it has potential.WE'll see where you take it.

These stories are supposed to be "EROTIC", hence "Literotica". But Mushy is about as close as it gets. Also, when he calls her a realestate "magnet" it should be "magnate". A "magnet" picks up nails off the floor. A powerful

business person may be a "magnate".

Got some work to do.