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Break up your paragraphs.

When something important changes (speaker, location, effect, action, idea, focus), make a paragraph break.

Just don't find the concept of a husband and wife seeking out others outside of their marriage for sex. Why get married? Why form attachments? It makes me wonder if the number one most performed procedure in NZ Healthcare is to be tested for STDs?

Where'd the dialogue go? This had all the emotional appeal of a grocery list, the readability of a government publication on "preparing your taxes," and the interest of a Yoko Ono song.