All Comments on 'Martha My Dear'

by technology.

Really no wriggle room there. She can't claim innocence or that they made a mistake. Stick a fork in her, she's done.

I loved it, thanks.

She might even be able to trade up in terms of husband's income ( after signing pre-nup). A cursory glance at long, star studded dating history of Jeff Bezos's current arm candy makes me wonder if Ms. Sanchez's nether muscle isolation control would be termed amazon prime.

As for HDK's writing ? All is forgiven for his last iffy submission to this genre.

Ergo the obvious score

Fully marks *****

The steam-powered stocking frame was a step too far, and now we've got the accursed microchip. So much for the promised 'gentler' 2019.

HDK's story was fun.

Lue

This is one of them. A real little story in 750 words. I looked at the list and most of them are about fucking Mom. Jezazz screwed all the pooches, with this one. Great story.

You did it; 750 words was all you needed to tell the tale. It's a complete story as far as I'm concerned, although you'll probably catch some grief from those who like everything spelled out.

Well done. Thanks for posting. 5 stars.

This contest is right up HDK's alley. No one is as concise as he. No wasted words but a complete story. The great ones make it look easy.

reasonable man

Fun little flash story, 5*.

I would love for this to keep going. So many possible ways to go.

LOL! Great story! Perfect ending!

Thanks for the laughter! Very nice short!

when HDK puts pen to paper. Love it.

I have nothing to add to that!

Can't explore what went wrong with their marriage in 750 words, but maybe the husband is just now finding out it never was right. Easy cum easy go.

Will miss the smell of charred flesh possible with a longer story, but I think we all know what she's going to get shoved up her ass.

Operative word here being "blue".

So many good stories packed into 750 words. Several would make good first chapters in a series.

Tight and funny. I've come to expect that from you, and you didn't disappoint.

Hooked

Always a charm. Loved it!

if not totally new, story. Very well done, in my opinion. I have come to look forward to your offerings and you mostly deliver. Hey, Babe Ruth didn't hit a home run every time at bat but he was still one of the best baseball players, hitters, there ever was. So, thanks Babe, for the homer this time.

OK I will, the Prius BT doesn't work like that....

But hey, it was a fun little story and the reveal at the end was lovely, 5*

Great twist on technology and I know this is fiction but from my experience if the phone gets picked up by the Bluetooth of a car the users phone goes mute to prevent feedback. So if Martha’s phone call from Bill was intercepted she would not have been able to hear the conversation or reply.

Don’t think Bluetooth works that way. Know it doesn’t on our cars. It gives us the option of one, or the other ... not both. Aside from that quibble (and I believe BT COULD be made to happen that way) it was a delightful quicky.

Sweetie seems to NOT be smart enough to demand good discretion before evaluating dick thickness.

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5*

Ain't technology grand!

Ha, love that new car now bitch? LMAO, Five Stars!

Another fun read from my favorite Beatle Fan.

Shafted by her lover and then shafted by technology.

Another great story by one of the.masters. Enjoyed it very.much.

Great story and to convey so much in 750 words or less is stellar writing!

AIn't technology a bitch? This was vintage HDK but not on the funny side. But letting your kid, your husband and the wife of the man you're fucking know that you're cheating, all at one time, is quite the achievement. But my favorite line? "Gonna see a man about a horse"! I'm STILL laughing at that one. Well done.

Very diabolical! I enjoyed it immensely.

Bluetooth features on newer cars do work exactly as they did in this story--a well-written, concise story from one of the masters.

well done

i love when rhere are consequences for cheaters

5 stars and 100 hard ons

Your usual mastery of the craft. More fun per word than anyone I know. Thanks, Randi.

Normally, he does it in two pages, but 750 is enough. Nicely done. The new technology can be a bitch right. :>)

Excellent

built-up; short stories are HDK's strength; typical HDK terse, blunt-talking characters; no unnecessary psychobabble and recriminations and self-flagellation on the wife's part. I actually kind of feel sorry for the girl getting caught. She must have been one happy soul before getting caught. Sad, but good story this.

This is why I hate high tech stuff.

I liked the story and gave it good marks even though I've never seen Bluetooth work that way: when my (or my wife's) car grabs the call, the phone is cut out so she'd have known.

Still, an amusing story.

Hard to keep anything secret any more, a different surprise a week early, nice. Good job Sue was on the line, too, saves another awkward phone call. 5*

has only to read this little gem. 750 words is (are?) no sweat for an author who has already known just how much he needs to tell us, and doesn't bother with all the excess context. He's clear, funny (always), and to the point.

Beautifully done! And I especially like how Martha's name momentarily becomes "Joan". (Presumably everyone knows her as Nancy...)

Gotta love high tech.

You've been posting on this story for 15 years now. Fuck. An actual fucking legend.

That's high praise. 5 stars.

For any "bluetooth doesn't work that way!" comments and sure enough...

It did work that way for me and my wife once (a very banal call) that I heard both sides of her conversation with her female coworker.

I used that in a story, also. :-)

BUSTED!!!!

Great story and 5 stars.

Martha My Love

"Silly girl....be true to me."

Yes, she should have.

For the read.

Hey PiperHamlit! Kinda draggin the bottom with your self promotion.

I am divorced because my wife's family heard a conversation I had with a female neighbor. We flirted but there was nothing really going on at that time. But since my wife and I are now separated, I can no longer say that her neighbor and I are just flirting. Thank you Blue Tooth.

Gotta watch technology! especially if you have secrets and a loose tongue!

Where is the rest?.

I had heard that HDK liked to fish and baited a good hook, but I was unaware he was a master at it. :) Anyway, great read, HDK. I'll mention you in my next missive. LOL!

Loved it!

Terrific! Just great!

Jedd Clampett (carvohi)

Got to love technology. Every time my wife gets in the car, and I'm in the living room, I get a notification how far it is to where ever she's going - stops by the time she's at the end fo the driveway.

Great convo

Just absolutely FUCKING-A-GREAT!!!! Thank you so much for the nice rolling on the ground laugh, I needed that this morning to kick start the day. LOL

And I remenber it happen !!

But in my story the husband was cheating !!

Ouch, oops!

Lol!!!

Lol. Too funny

She’s just spreading the love around, is all.

Really great short story. Reed, you’re beginning to sound like Lue making the same lame comment on every story. Some people just don’t accept cheating.

Wooooooooooooops!

I'm new to these reviews. But, this looks like a great one. Funny. Good beginning, middle buildup. and end.

Thanks for writing it.

Read it through once, went back to the top and read it again, Laughing all the way!

Fucking hilarious! 🤣🤣🤣

Sex is like Football .. It is a Contact sport

Have to agree... Fucking hilarious.

Pretty funny but I have to ask, who the fuck is Joan?

Nice

Just one thing to say. Fucking cunt.

Jeez, what technology can do. She sure got the surprise of her life.

Wife is just another Narcissistic bitch, that thinks the world revolves around her. Most of the time, they never achieve real happiness. Another 40 something woman, enters the divorce pool...

Very clever. Be careful. Eyes and ears are everywhere.

bluetooth phones can't support both using the phone and the car at the same time, but that's techie details and not part of HDN's world.

Good concept but the ending is short

This is one I wish kept going it was a wonderful ultra short but the probable reactions all round would be epic.

The exact same thing happen to me. My wife was sitting in the patio next to our garage talking on her phone. I was backing her car out of the garage to go and get the oil changed. When the blue tooth system kicked in on her car over the speakers. I just sat there acting as though I was looking for some papers in the glove box, all the while she just kept on talking. Obvious to the fact I was hearing both sides of the conversation. Technology is great, but sometimes it’s AWFUL.

Les

Nice start of a story

Funny stuff. Wish it had a more detailed ending

If you can't ejaculate then you might as well not masturbate.

that's what you get for driving a Prius . I think I can see the future on this marriage and it ends in Divorce Court

Needs a follow on chapter.

Karma is a bitch :)

LOL

Ooops

A very possible scenario. A few weeks ago I was going to take my wife’s vehicle to gas it up for her because she was taking a short trip the next day. I kissed my wife goodby and told her I would be back in a few minutes. I walked through the door and into the garage, started the car and started to back out of the garage when the Blue Tooth kicked in and I was suddenly overhearing a telephone conversation that my wife had just made. I just sat there and listened, I won’t go into detail of what I over heard, but I can assure you her call was very enlightening !

Great little story, every cheater should be wary of modern technology.

I don’t think if one is connected from a blue toooth…conversation can happen in the normal manner if the phone is with you. No sound will come from the phone as the sound wil be relayed from the Bluetooth speakers!! This story seems too out of touch withbreality

I found myself hating her so much early in the story that the ending only illuminated everything. She was truly an unlikable human being. Good to be rid of her.

C'mon it was a fun one. Will the bluetooth bit might have been off this is LW, if the fucking husband was a Navy Seal, with CIA connections and a Golden ticket from the President of the United States, and several other countries and he blew Bill up with a drone strike, you'd be wetting yourselves with glee.

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HDK at his comical best! 5 stars.

If it's connected to the cars Bluetooth how is she hearing Bill? He could hear her be his responses would be to the car audio

Too short - can’t give it a 5

Isn't technology wonderful? Good old bluetooth has not worked for me all the time but for this story it is great!

Funny ! A great, short little slice of life. Well wtitten and to the point.

5-😊😊😊😊😊

Great one

A neighbor of mine got in trouble this way. He had fiancée No. 1 in the car when he parked and got out to check his mailbox. He then got a call from fiancée No. 2. When he tried to answer the call, it answered on the car speaker via Bluetooth and the fiancées were speaking to each other. He had some 'splashing to do and, eventually, fewer fiancées.

Haha

Oh, Gee Whiz. How great life is. I've rolled on the floor laughing at this story. You gotta love trchnology.

Funny and a good story.

A funny snippet. Even for a short, non-story, I think five stars is in order..

JPB