All Comments on 'Me and My Half Brother'

Half brother or step brother? Make up your mind. *

Not being fluent in English is no excuse for pushing that handicap off on us. Please stop.

You are not a good writer.

So many errors within one story are fard to find, or follow. Your English Language instructor should be in position to assist.

A paragraph that approches from two, or more, perspectives is likely your most major mistake. Especially when it is repeated!

Would have scored this as average, but could not. In respect of your effort, I simply will not rate this offering.

English is obviously not your first language. Please do not use a translator to covert your language to English, as it came out as Engrish. The Story was mediocre at best.. Suggestion: Dont quit your day job.. Writing isn't for you.

There are not enough words to properly outline the errors within this paltry effort for a story.

Best use for this is as an example of the most errors within a modestly short story !

Couldn'the say I hate it, at least you did try.