All Comments on 'My First Time with my Love.'

You, you, you - how should a male person be reading this? One star for ostracizing male readers.

If I had to say one good thing about this story it would be "unique".

The first sentence does not make sense: "So when we come back after the pool to get ready for the party." What?

Then I see the many lines starting with "I would..." and that's it. I created better essays in school.

no story, just dirty talk, one star.

you no writing, no story to reading about it, can no understandy, no fun two red

How much more fucked up can this get?

This is a weird 'story' - the narrative style is incoherent and stilted - that is wearying to read. Please rewrite.

Very nice story. Very soft erotic, from a female pov. Write some more. Loved it.

Very nice story. I really felt each line. Crisp . Soft erotic