All Comments on 'Slave Management 101-3'

Getting better. Can't wait for the brat to show up. But all good things come to those who wait. So take your time you are doing great Tlanuwa.

Thank you sir 😊

Good start, though if it's a story about James being his sister's keeper, it would likely be better for pacing/flow if you inserted a few more scenes throughout these early chapters involving the sister and whatever path led to (I'm assuming here) her eventual slavery.

You're correct, I take entirely to long to bring her into the story. It wasn't intentional, this is just how the tale is coming out of my head. I hope to write another story when I finish this one and I intend to do much better. Thanks for your courteous suggestions.

Mmmmmm your descriptions are very good, I like how you are progressing the story