All Comments on 'Not What You Think'

God I love the bisexual incest stories. Even though this was the first of yours I have read, I will read them all. Consider yourself on my favorites list for sure. Keep it up as I am now.

Really good story, enjoyed it, first of yours I've read, but will be reading more! I like the bi male stories. Something about them...

1) Please ask an editor or proofreader to look at it. You wrote "But mother mature was working her magic...", when it should have been "mother nature," & I saw some more.

2) This could've been a multi-page story. Your story description says "Guy falls for girlfriend's father and shares mutual blow job," okay, why not stick with just that idea for this story? Add a page 2 or another chapter & have the girls action separate. I appreciate a good lesbian scene, written or on screen!

3) I like people described & you don't have any descriptions. What age are Hillary, Cathy,the boyfriend & the parents, late teens, college age, late 40s, 50s... What is their height, hair color, & a general breast size for the female characters? What do Ralph or Hillary's boyfriend look like, hairy, or smooth, slim or mid aged weight, circumcised or not. Hillary's friend Cathy is wearing a top that only covers her nipples, but you don't describe her, this is disappointing. Is she tall or short, slim or chubby. Do your characters stroke themselves watching the others? Are their pussy's smooth, hairy or trimmed? Try to give readers a clearer mental picture.

3) I enjoy hearing the action described, do the characters talk during sex or just moan? Or do they talk & loss the power of speech, when penetrated or sucked / eaten? Do their legs tremble from the stimulation? Since you put the guys in a 69, were their asses smooth, hairy, trimmed so their assholes were smooth? Did the guys or girls eat ass? Since this was an outdoor scene, was it clear & sunny or overcast? Were they sunbathing, what time of day does your story start. Does it take place over minutes or hours? It was difficult to tell.

I hope you continue the story, you left a couple of openings there to do so. Chapter 2 could describe the girls play while Ralph & the boyfriend are in the bathhouse or explore the boyfriend & Ralph's next adventure? Does Gertie or Hillary record their next encounter onto video? Does it push anyone's buttons to be recorded? If you have someone proofread your story & add small details, it creates a better mental picture for me. Looking forward to a next chapter.

Agree smoke717 that bisexual incest is especially hot..I’m the stereotypical straight retired 70 year old. But I desperately need an experienced gay man like very very soon. Just popped a tiny pill..rock hard now..Great story and thanks so much TB in NC..

JT