by Insom77Oz
couldn't get past the first illiterate page.
TRY to get your characters straight. If it is Raul, keep it as Raul and not change it to Ruiz. Maybe use your clipboard for the insertion of the names. I hate when writers are too damn lazy to read their own crap, but get pissy when we call them out for being the idiots who wrote the garbage in the first place!
Sorry, kept thinking about the MC two little girls. Whilst the parents are whoring around what about them?
Both are sick selfish cunts. They don’t care about their kids at all.
3/5