All Comments on 'Observed, Then Noted'

Yes, very poetic and classically written. I read through the entire storey and did not skip over one word or phrase. I enjoyed reading it. When I finished, I wondered if there was any sex involved! I wasn't aroused or even titillated. Was it written by a computer program? It was 'souless'.

I do appreciate your effort!

First my apology's. I didn't get far enough to find any sex, so my comments are not based on the whole work. With regard to the short amount that I did manage to read and re-read, I would say that the author has a great technical ability, when it comes to writing. Sadly the work fails, because most people wish to relax when they are reading erotica. If my comments are too harsh, RetMarut, then forgive me. Loosen your tie a little, when writing, and I think I could quite possibly enjoy your style, but the first ten paragraph's need to capture a soul.

Regards.

Wizard.