All Comments on 'Old School Friends'

Good premise.

Action much too fast.

Three stars.

I think you had the female pov quite nicely. Unfortunately Tony is very unsympathetic to me. She should have kicked him the first time he ignored the safeword.

This is fiction, but ignoring a safe word, especially as he gave it to her is not on. Just a suggestion, but you could have played it that he reluctantly followed the safe word.

Les

I appreciate the comments here and accept that Tony’s ignoring of the safe word is wrong.

It’s my mistake as a writer. I liked the idea of ‘Red’ being overheard and misinterpreted by the barman. Sorry, if it spoilt your enjoyment of the story.