All Comments on 'Older Sister Dropping by Pt. 01'

OOh you are naughty leaving us a cliffhanger like that. Please try to make your chapters at least a couple of Lit pages so we can get into the story. Great start though. Please keep going.

Yes, next time please.

I'm confused. 😕 Unless I didn't read this correctly, this is really a story about a young man who has an extremely close friend who is an older woman. They're NOT actually brother and sister with the same biological parents or even related with one parent in common like half-siblings. They're two people who cared enough about each other to informally adopt each other as brother and sister. Did I get that right? ✅

Okay, so I have no problem with that and would be a huge hypocrite if I did. I have a female friend who loves me so much that she calls me her "older brother" and truly considers me to be family even though we have absolutely no biological connection whatsoever. But if I slept with her, it would NOT be incest. (Yes, we have discussed that possibility and she said that if I ever tried to seduce her that she would gladly fuck my brains out.)

But getting back to the point here, this really belongs in some other category than incest/taboo. It possibly belongs in Loving Wives since the girl is cheating on her husband. This wasn't the story I was expecting it to be. 1/5

This doesn't belong here and it's stupid as well.

older sister like and doesn't know where his bathroom is at ? really

Terrible.

Calling somebody your sister doesn't make it Incest or Taboo

I, too, believe the story is categorized incorrectly (Loving Wives or Mature). An editor would be beneficial to fix some of the stilted language and typos.

The premise of the story is enjoyable and I encourage you to continue to hone your craft. It takes courage to share via the written word and open yourself up to criticism. Keep writing and keep fantasizing because I look forward to further entries in this erotic tale.

This story needs a bit of work. Give you 3 for effort. I will wait and see how the next chapter goes. AAA+

No incest, no taboo ... wrong category, maybe?

Why would she need to ask where the bathroom was? Not plausible I’m afraid. You need the help of an editor.

I'm afraid you're confused at what is the definition of taboo. Further, you lack the creativity to be good writer. You can tell a tale but don't understand the composition of a story that will draw reader in to never let the story be put down.

Not his sister, so no incest.

Name three girls that wear a bra with a tube top.

I like the premise but the story needs to slow down to develop the characters better.

Wrong section *

Bring the next part!