All Comments on 'One Night Ch. 02'

It's not a bad story, you have a lot of potential. I just wish you spent some time editing it before you submitted it. There were a lot of typos and it marred my overall opinion of the story.

It's getting good Molly... keep it coming, I love it.

chapters together to make one. The first ended to abruptly as you were just beginning to introduce us to your protagonist. The end of this chapter seemed a much better place to stop.

Seeing the misspellings and confusing sentence structure makes me think you are rushing; rushing in your writing, rushing to end chapters, just rushing with your story, even though you warn this will be a slow roller or something to that effect.

Take your time. Read and re-read your work, read it out so you can see how your sentences flow, and by all means: USE SPELLCHECK.