All Comments on 'Orc War Ch. 01'

Great story writing. Interesting plot and characters. Hot sex. I look forward to the next chapter. 5 stars

Not bad! The pacing at the 3/4 mark felt rushed. I think slowly down a little bit with the woman becoming addicted (if that is the right word) would be a good idea, too. Aside from that, my only other complaint is the use of “Omg.” Really good stuff!

Too many spelling errors. You need to find someone who can act as an editor to read and correct a story before you submit it.